Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Finding a job that is stable and decent is a challenging and crucial issue in everyone's life. While some may argue that it was easier to identify the ideal career in the past, I firmly believe that clarifying which job leads to a wonderful life is way more effortless nowadays. I consider this way based on several reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, widespread access to the Internet contributes to the easy obtaining of career information. In the past, people's resources to acquire information were limited. The methods they used most were looking for books in libraries, and asking experienced acquaintances for suggestions. However, these methods to access career information are time-consuming and inefficient. In contrast, due to technological improvement, today we can easily search for massive and diverse information via electronic devices in a short time. For example, I once wanted to understand the career path of a relatively new occupation. The only thing I had to do was to open my laptop and type in the keywords relating to that occupation. In just a few seconds, I got infinite information all over the world. The Internet can not only assist me to find the career knowledge I am not familiar with but also help societies to identify what kind of job ensures a brilliant future.
Secondly, owing to the flourishing of social media, it is easy to build connections with experienced people who have already succeeded in their careers. That is to say, individuals can ensure what job leads to the perfect life by referring to the experiences of seniors. For example, my older brother who is a high-paid engineer chose his occupation by adopting the advice of a senior he met in the alumni organization from social media. If he had not built the connection with and absorbed the experiences of that senior, he would not have considered the engineering job and would not have lived a secure and successful life right now.
To sum up, I am of the opinion that identifying an ideal job is definitely more simple nowadays than it was decades ago. This is because today's wide Internet access allows people to obtain thorough information fast and effortlessly. Moreover, the development of social media lets people easily connect with experienced seniors, thereby adopting their past experiences to succeed in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 352, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...rienced seniors, thereby adopting their past experiences to succeed in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, as to, for example, in contrast, kind of, to begin with, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03553299492 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97279963747 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558375634518 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8548035206 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.421052632 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7368421053 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21052631579 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199910555803 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531212964462 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469529921166 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11104890518 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246913403772 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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