People care more about public recognition than about money. Even if no more money is given, public recognition can still make people work harder.
Gaining a wild recognition and earning a host of money are both the ways an individual defines success. Some people may assert that they do not care about how much they earn if obtaining popularity in a society, whereas I firmly believe that most human beings consider more about money than public recognitions, and people would not work with their effort if there's no financial motivation. I harbor this belief for several reasons which I would explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
The first reason that came to my mind was money can support humans everyday needs, a basic but essential factor in life which public recognition can barely satisfy. That is to say, with money, people can have adequate clothing, food, and comfortable accommodation, which are the fundamental and crucial needs to ensure the survival of life. Drawing back to my personal experience, when discussing our future goal with my friends, everyone agrees that our ultimate achievement goal in life is earning a great fortune, and providing ourselves and our family with a good quality of life.
Some may argue that public recognition provides individuals with a sense of achievement. But do they realize that if someone cannot support themselves with basic demand, any mental satisfaction will have nothing to do with their lives. People would suffer from hunger and a lack of security if they didn't have enough financial resources.
To sum up, I am of the opinion that it is impossible for most people to care more about their popularity instead of money. This is because it is money that can meet humans daily needs. If one gains just wild recognition but has no money, it is challenging for him or her to keep on with life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, whereas, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90311418685 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66204905858 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57785467128 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1019153813 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.083333333 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0833333333 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320722310495 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114816398992 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952429987385 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203255990038 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102214179097 0.0645574589148 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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