Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People care more about public recognition than about money. Even if no more money is given, public recognition can still make people work harder.
Wealth and fame have always been the center of human beings' attention. From ancient times, people have used wealth to be recognized and used their fame as a means of wealth accumulation. It has always been a two-way street. Yet, I believe the side of public recognition and fame may have a heavier weight. I believe so, particularly because of these two effects. Let us call them the internal and the external effects.
First, although money, or wealth in general, has always been considered a means of generating happiness, it is not always the case. Of course, money can assist people in their pursuit of happiness, but there is a ceiling on the capacity of happiness it provides. According to a study by the noble laureate Daniel Kahneman, although wealth and money can create happiness, it has a diminishing effect. He estimated that after an $80,000 annual salary, the effect of money on one's happiness diminishes drastically. So, people tend to look for another way of self-promotion, namely by pursuing public recognition. This is the internal effect that nudges people towards working harder just to be recognized by other members of their society.
Another reason, I believe, is external or from the environment people work in. Employers, as external agents, try to exploit this innate desire for public recognition. Organizations have always conducted events like "employee of the month", "CEO of the year" or such to promote the pursuit of these goals as a higher achievement than just merely a higher salary. Even public institutions, such as governments, do so by promoting their employees as "Civil Servants", suggesting they are merely working for the sake of serving the society and not just the end of the month paycheck. Whether this exploitation is ethical or not, I leave it to you, but this is the external effect of why people may care more about public recognition than money.
In conclusion, I believe, although the materialistic view of one's job is not flawed at all, people lean more on the side of public recognition. Whether religion, culture, or external pressure of society caused this belief is up to social scientists to decide.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...me have always been the center of human beings attention. From ancient times, people h...
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Line 7, column 62, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...eve, although the materialistic view of ones job is not flawed at all, people lean m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, look, may, so, in conclusion, in general, of course, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11111111111 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97401814901 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519444444444 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7425823606 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8421052632 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9473684211 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250231335295 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069909703282 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783772972419 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13301525855 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598697768756 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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