Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Sometimes, people are unable to live alone; therefore, friend plays an essential role in most individuals' lives. Some people may assert that it is crucial to make new friends, while I firmly believed that maintaining the relationships with old friends is more beneficial. I consider this way for several reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
The first advantage came to my mind of keeping old friends is they understand better about me. In this way, when I encounter difficluties in life, they would provide me with useful suggestions which are drove from my personalities and past experiences. Drawing back from my personal story, I was once being so hard to determine which company to enter when receiving two job offers, one from a big company of a relatively trivial position, the other from a small start-up of a manager position. I shared the trouble with a group of close friend from high school, and asked for their advice. What surprising to me was that they consistently suggest me to take the offer of being a manager in the start-up. They further elaborated that according to my strong personality, I would not satisfy if doing trivial jobs in big company, and it really fit my characteristic to lead a group in an energatic start-up. Finally, I accepted their advice and are now working pleasently as a manager in a small but passionated company.
On top of that, old friends are more willing to spend time company with me when I am facing a frustrating time. For example, I broke up with my ex-boyfriend last year. That was such a long and impressive relationship that I was extremely depressed after we decided to keep each other apart. At that period, my best friend from childhood asked me to move to her apartment, and stayed with me most of the time. Although I keep expressing negative energy to her, she paciently comforted me without any disatisfaction. I recovered soon because of her. I believed that if we had not become friends for decades, and had not keep strenghtening our relationship through out our lives, she would not have spend those precious time with me.
To sum up, I am of the perspective that maintaining old friends is way more significant than making new friends. This is because old friends know me better so that they can provide functional suggestion to me when I face problems. Moreover, it is more likely for old friends than for new friends to spend time with me when I am having hard times.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 204, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'driven'.
Suggestion: driven
...de me with useful suggestions which are drove from my personalities and past experien...
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Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...ich are drove from my personalities and past experiences. Drawing back from my personal story, I...
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Line 5, column 619, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'kept'.
Suggestion: kept
...become friends for decades, and had not keep strenghtening our relationship through ...
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Line 5, column 655, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...not keep strenghtening our relationship through out our lives, she would not have spend tho...
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Line 5, column 697, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...rough out our lives, she would not have spend those precious time with me. To sum ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, while, for example, to sum up, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77336448598 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85360923055 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528037383178 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9047655478 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.15 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200997887734 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704148156973 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687541440572 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14911371328 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649571967087 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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