Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that rules have a great impact on society. There has always been a controvercial debate on whether young indivisuals were being regulated by rules that are too strict. As far as I am concern, I disagree that the regulations nowadays are too harsh to the teenagers to follow. My opinion is based on several reasons which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First, compared to decades ago, young people nowadays obtain more freedom. That is to say, today's teenagers do not have to follow that many rules than they were in the past. Drawing back to several decades ago, the youths have to follow the expectations and regulations from their parents and the society. For instance, when my grandmother were young, she had no choice but to marry the man choosed by her parents at a certain age, to say, 23 years old. In contrast, nowadays we can have our own choice who to start a relationship with. Moreover, some people do not want to get married, and this is definitely no problem and not a surprise. From this example, it is clear to see that the youths do not have to follow the regulation as strict as they did in the past.
Secondly, the level of age become obscured in recent years; therefore, young indivisuals do not have to obey the older people completely. In the past, due to the traditional concepts, younger people has to follow what older people say, even though the regulations were sometimes unsubstancial. While societies today ensure the equivalance to everyone ragardless of their ages. In other words, young people do not have to obey the rules set by the elders, obtaining more chances to speak for themselves. For instance, nowadays when a teenager find that the class rules set by his teacher do not make sense, he can deliver his point of view and propose to eliminate or adjust the regulations. Nonetheless, if this happened in ten decades ago, the teenager may be viewed as being rude and unrespectful to his teacher.
To sum up, I disagree with the idea that the rules which young people have to follow nowadays are too strict. This is because young individuals today gain more freedom to choice for themselves, and do not need do fully obey with older people in recent years.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in contrast, in other words, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1847.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72378516624 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62955155403 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506393861893 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.2742771335 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2105263158 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5789473684 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36842105263 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304535518631 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100973864857 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703177805248 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220075993397 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064765365042 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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