With the accelerating development of our society, arts and athletics have been playing two critical roles in our daily life. It is hard to judge which has more significance. Some people contend that the government should allocate enough fund to support the athletes when it comes to their contribution to our society and inspiring people to stay in the prime of their health. However, from my perspective and actual observation of the life makes me believe that the government should advocate the arts because it is the only way to express the culture and civilization of our society. I will try to elaborate on my point of view below.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that Arts effect and role are indisputable in improving the culture of any society as it is the only significant place for a county because it display both tradition and culture of that community. Art activities like art galleries and exhibitions could be held in cities. This kind of events fill the free hours of people in a valuable way. People could bring their children to these activities, which children’s culture and knowledge about history and art, both are improved after visiting such places. What is more, overseas can easily get an idea about the past and the present condition of that country by visiting many art exhibitions, and museums instead of reading a 100-page book to learn. Also, theaters and cinemas are also considered in this area. If we eliminate these kinds of sites from any town, the quality of life plunge there. I will an example from my experience to shed the light on that subject, I remember when I was a child there is a cinema in our city which our parents brought us to there every weekend. We watched a lot of movies and masterpieces of cinema which contribute a significant role in our culture. After a while, this cinema was closed because of some financial problems. We couldn’t imagine our weekend without going to the cinema and watching movies. Fortunately, municipality of town bought that place. Therefore the cinema could continue to work. This example of my own life illustrates how and why governments should support the artistic activities and places in cities.
Another reason that deserves more word is that athletics could get sponsors from non-governmental companies. We all know most of sports teams can get sponsors because of their ability to rich a lot of people from broadcasting their matches from media. These companies most of the time compete with each other to be a sponsor of a sports team. Therefore, the money problem of sports teams is less than art activities. On the other hand, art activities could not get sponsors like sports teams; therefore, this duty belongs to governments. To give an example to shed light on that subject, Nike is a big company which producing sports clothes, is the sponsor of most sports teams, even the more infamous ones like state teams. But I think Nike is not a sponsor of an art exhibition of a very famous artist. Not only, Nike, but it is also same for most of the companies.
As all things considered, the government should spend money to support the art because the arts are the symbol of the society's civilization, it is the way to make our county more appealing to the visitors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, while, i think, kind of, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2728.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 565.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82831858407 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73204287414 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484955752212 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 863.1 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0451420914 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4285714286 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1785714286 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64285714286 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204453357111 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525387522287 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554277967156 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144612510551 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565087194865 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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