Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects to funding the government money in arts and olympics. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely say that the government should expend money in olympics. It is my firm belief for two reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, a country name, fame and glory will enrich and widespread all over the world by winning a medal in olympics. The number of medals won indirectly represent the success and ability of the country. For example, Jamaica, an obscure country which is a very late independent country made its mark in the world sports as having fastest men and women on Earth. Moreover, their culture and passion for athletics, society and the government support for the sprinters spurred their graph in medal tally from three medals in 1948 England olympics to eleven medals in 2016 Rio olympics. As a result, medal winning to a country is not only a personal achievement but also a country triumph by taking part in global competitions. Therefore, the government should definitely fund more money into olympics to promote a nation's glory.
Secondly, success breeds success. Countries that win a lot of medals inspire younger athletes to take up sports, who grow up to be the next generation of medal winners. Drawing from my own experience, when my friend was in school, he admired Tyson Gay who is a fastest runner and always wanted to become like him. He can run 100 meters in around 20-25 seconds. In addition, with his talent and support from the school, he played at state level. He was selected for national level, but due to less support from the government, he could not reach his goal. Therefore, If the government had invested more money in olympics, he would have brought medals to the country and promoted our nation's pride.
To sum up, I strongly believe that the government should invest more money in support of athletes. This is due to the fact that country fame will be promoted and recognized world-wide and it encourages many youngsters to become future athletics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in addition, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82825484765 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58655758768 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570637119114 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2919446304 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8333333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0555555556 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147751107338 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515614397668 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640393535408 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986164975351 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190283936447 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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