Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People might be buried in deep thought when they initially see the statement governments should fund the arts more than athletics. Some people argue as if it is the commonly accepted truth that the arts should be supported because it plays a vital role in our lives, while others hold a different idea that the advantages of spending more money on athletics outweigh the arts. Frankly speaking, from my perspective, there are more demerits than merits to let the government subsidize athletics. In this essay, I would like to take a closer look at the statement based on the following points.
The most immediate point is that putting government money into top-level athletics promotes the sport in general. It is as clear as daylight that successful athletes are good role models for young people. Medal-winning success at the Olympics and World Championships can encourage more people to take part in sport. Part of any government’s job is to promote good health, so they should put money into anything which encourages more people to have an active lifestyle.
Another point worth mentioning is that international sport is good for the national spirit, helping to unite a country in support of its team and athletes. It is widely admitted that sporting success boosts national pride and happiness, as well as making the country more respected around the world. For instance, Guo jingjing is the world champion of women’s diving in the Olympic games. After she won the gold medal with breaking the world records, more and more foreign countries paid attention to women’s diving of China. Not only the athletes but also the whole Chinese national diving team was highly acclaimed by the world.
Further lending credence to my position is that being a top sportsman or woman means hours of training every day in order to become the very best. It is not possible to train in this way while working in a normal job. It is crucially important for governments to pay for them and give the best equipment and coaching if we want to see top athletes competing at the highest level. For me, hardly can the athletes or the Olympic teams succeed without sufficient money.
Having weighed the points above, I have no choice but to reiterate my personal point of view that governments should spend more money on athletics rather than the arts. Although the arts play a vital role in modeling our perspectives and enriching our lives, athletics have impacted the nation and the public positively and efficiently.
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Suggestion: Further,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97156398104 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68533499049 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563981042654 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7354130102 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.421052632 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2105263158 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21797459282 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618253484495 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457054698949 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117135607186 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603545908271 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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