Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's world, governments are faced with a lot of discussion about how they should allocate their fundation resources. Some people believe that it is more important to spend money in support of the arts. I, personally, oppose this idea and believe that it is more useful that governments should be a state-sponsored of Olympic teams. In the following paragraphs, I explain my reason to clarify my viewpoint.
To begin with, spending money in support of athletics instead of art would bring more money for the country. The presence of athletes of a country in an international tournament like the Olympic not only will bring cash prize in case of their prosperity, but also will lead to introducing the country to the world. This well-known sports festival will be seen by millions of people and they will be more familiar with the country which the athlete is from. Therefore, if the athletes perform good and attract the attention of the people from other countries, foreigners will be more interest to have information about the country and maybe someday want to visit it and see the sports facilities or the sportsmen closer. As a result, spending money for reinforcing Olympic team is a great opportunity to earn more money.
Second, spending money for supporting athletics and their prosperity will make the people of the country happier. The athletics are very famous between people and all of them follow the competitions, Specially during the important matches like the Olympics. However, if the athletics of a country win on an international tour, it will make the people of the county delighted. For example, during the last Olympic, one of my country's sportsmen, which was a wrestler, achieve the gold medal. All the people gathered together watching the final play and after he won the game, the streets were full of people who were so happy and were celebrating. As is clear, invest in sports will bring more passion into society.
In conclusion, it is better for governments to spend money in support of their sports rather than the arts. The popularity of sports in the world lead a country to earn more money, and the prosperity of athletics will bring people to a happier mood.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1832.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9247311828 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73533228726 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494623655914 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1211733346 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.764705882 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250231715752 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986359408124 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0881672721014 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184292550042 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743465463628 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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