Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A big debate always takes place when the government considers decisions of where to spend revenues. Some people believe that taxpayers' money should be spent more in support of the arts than in support of athletics. However, I disagree with this point of view. In my opinion, I believe arts and sports are equally important and deserve some subsidies from states.
First of all, sports could be as beneficial for the economy as arts. Unearthing artistic talent positively contributes to the society. A country without artists will have less or no genuine venues for people to enjoy watching or learning about art. It will lack museums, movie theatres, galleries and other places for artistic shows. As a result, the employment rate will suffer as there will not be job opportunities that these places usually offer for the masses. Similarly, having a national team plays a vital role in the economy of the city or the country as it provides more work opportunities for ordinary people. In addition, tourists from outside the country usually come to watch sports events which also guarantees a booming economy. For instance, I remember when the sports team in my city was negotiating with our city council over the stadium that was leased for them in our neighbourhood, and they were not able to reach a deal, people started to talk about the issue that this team was considering leaving the stadium. I was terrified as this place was providing hundreds to thousands of jobs to the residents who were, in turn, paying local taxes and if they left, it would be a big loss for my community. Hence, athletic or any sports teams are one of the first things that officials should take into account when discussing how they could wisely invest tax revenues.
Secondly, spending money in supporting athletics is essential for the country to be well-represented during international tournaments. Funding athletic programs and facilitating enrollment will encourage more individuals to think about having a professional career in that field. Consequently, large number of well-trained professional athletes will compete locally to represent the country. Without having this local contest, the community will not have a powerful team. A more powerful team will have physical and emotional gains for their country. For example, players who win gold medals will provide more business opportunities such as signed t-shirts or other gifts. People around the world prefer to buy merchandise and watch shows for the winning and highly skilled sportsmen or sportswomen. Thus, a community that grows its athletic talents by all kinds of support will have a better economic stance than another community which might choose to ignore this realm.
In conclusion, athletics and arts are both essential for a society to thrive economically. This is because they both create job opportunities and the country could use brands from arts or athletics to promote business and welfare.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'taxpayers'' or 'taxpayer's'?
Suggestion: taxpayers'; taxpayer's
...pend revenues. Some people believe that taxpayers money should be spent more in support o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2493.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18295218295 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77787043566 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54261954262 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 760.5 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1388162646 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.875 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0416666667 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138746970353 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452176067098 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669416101069 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114936329365 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785359337742 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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