Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support . of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Over the past few years, the issue that whether governments should spend more money in support of the arts than the support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams has kindled heated debate among people. Depending on different personal experience, we find that a number of people hold the idea that the government should support athletics. However, given the chance, I tend to support the statement that our governments should spend more money in support of the arts.
To begin with, arts is a strong force that makes a country together. As we know, the main duty of a government is to fight against the attack of other countries. And art is a powerful weapon that even better than a gun and arch. For instance, different forms of arts such as poems and songs are used as two kinds of tools that contain the spirit of unity in ancient China. A history event called Besieged in All Sides illustrated a war between two countries with one's army is all from another's hometown. Every night they sang their song in different places of the army, which made the foreign army beats themselves and run away. As you can see, soldiers were all recalled by their nostalgia spread by the songs and poems. An ancient Chinese composer once said that music is a strength, which means that music will unit people together and fight against their common enemy.
I'm not saying that athletics is not good. Indeed, if people are all willing to train themselves and do more exercise, the countries they lived in will be much stronger. However, we are talking about the comparison between arts and athletics. Athletics, which will be idle of people and leads us to be stronger physically, are easy to beat when facing a stronger weapon and also easy to surrender. While arts means the unity of our spirit, which leads us to be more powerful when facing an unbeatable strength. For example, the song composed by musicians in the war will contain some lyrics such as Never Give Up, while a famous lecture in the British contains a word saying Never Surrender.
All in all, governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics. Because the supporting of athletics is mainly focusing on physical strength and a healthy body, while supporting of arts are mainly focusing on the way we judge the world and the spirit of unity，which is the main reason that makes the country live long and prosper.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, such as, talking about, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77197149644 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48565033349 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496437054632 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6062570665 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.736842105 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1578947368 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31970067419 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985116438795 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128823311152 0.0737576698707 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224179696725 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.169964817632 0.0645574589148 263% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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