Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades encourage students to learn. Use specific example and reasons to explain your opinion
Learning is a lifelong process. Basic learning experience comes from school education. The main purpose of the school’s education should be providing knowledge to students; but these days, students’ main concern became their grades rather than knowledge. In my opinion, grades do not encourage students to learn, but instead, it depresses them, and even sometimes force them to cheat in an exam.
First, the main disadvantage of grades is that it demotivates students in an exam which leads to depression after failure in the exam. Students try to get good grades because they know that only good grades can help them to get admission to top universities. Moreover, after graduating from top universities, chances of getting a good job are higher. When students get depressed because of their failure, they choose the wrong path in life, such as suicide. For example, I studied in Physical Therapy school form Rajiv Gandhi University, India. Students from social study department done project work on the death rate in youngsters and causes behind the deaths. During the research study showed that almost seventeen percent of youngsters committed suicides. Social sty department also concluded that most of the suicides happen because of the presser of competition of good grades. That was an eye-opening project. Thus, the university planned to conduct motivation seminars for all students of all department.
Second, students try their best to get excellent grades. When they fail they choose other paths which damage their future, such as cheating in an exam or taking drugs. India has a big black market to get good grades in the exam. Students and sometimes their parents pay huge money to get good scores. Further, cheating in exam and guilt of failure attracts them towards bed influences, such as drugs, alcohol, etc. For instance, my friend Manish study hard to get admission in B. J. Medical college for bachelor in medicines and surgery. Unfortunately, he did not get the required grades for admission. He tried indirectly through the black market to get admission in college. He failed in that try, and he lost his money as well during the scam process. He got so demotivated and started taking drugs. Fortunately, his parents found out early, still, he took one year to overcome his addiction. Also, he lost his time and opportunity to build a good carrier.
Let’s put in the nutshell, in daily life people do not need any grades to justify their knowledge. Students should be able to practically imply their knowledge that is the main purpose of education. I strongly believe that grades are demotivating students from learning, even it leads them to bad influences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... money as well during the scam process. He got so demotivated and started taking d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, still, thus, well, even so, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2267.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15227272727 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74135662711 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.155525767 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.5666666667 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6666666667 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03333333333 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116727571926 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0320795182655 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409961651561 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0933673969147 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521726600877 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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