Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades encourage students to learn. Use specific example and reasons to explain your opinion
Learning is a lifelong process. Basic learning experience comes from school education. The main purpose of education should be providing knowledge to students. These days, students’ main concern has become their grades rather than knowledge. In my opinion, grades do not encourage students to learn, but instead, it depresses them, and even sometimes force them to cheat in exams.
First, the main disadvantage of grades is that it demotivates students in an exam. Due to fear of low grades students get afraid of exams. Students work hard for good grades because they know, that is the only aide that can help them to get admission to top universities. Moreover, after graduating from top universities, chances of getting a good job are higher. When students get depressed because of their failure, they choose the wrong path in life, such as suicide. For example, I studied in Physical Therapy school from Rajiv Gandhi University, India. Students from social study department done a research study to understand the cause of the suicide rates in youngsters. The study results showed that out of all the study subjects, seventeen percent who attempted suicide were reasoned to failure during their education. That was an eye-opening result. Thus, the university conducted a motivational seminar on stress relieving techniques to overcome the exam fear, for all the university students.
Second, the guilt of failure attracts students towards bad influences, such as cheating, drugs, alcohol, etc. India has a very corrupted education system. There are people spread all over the country who ask for money from parents in return of a promise to give admission to whatever degree students want. For instance, my friend Manish was an average student in studies, however, his parents wanted him to be a doctor. Thus, he studied hard to get admission to medical school. Unfortunately, he did not get the required grades for admission. Then, he tried indirectly through the black market to get admission in college. But the person who promised him admission disappeared after taking his money. He and his parents were devastated after the incident and he started taking drugs. Fortunately, his parents found out early about his addiction, and they helped him to come out from his addiction. He almost took more than a year to overcome his addiction.
Let’s put in the nutshell, in daily life people do not need any grades to justify their knowledge. Students should be able to practically imply their knowledge that is the main purpose of education. I strongly believe that grades are demotivating to students from learning, and it leads them to bad influences.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, thus, even so, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19907407407 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77138152472 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543981481481 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.432097047 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.4482758621 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8965517241 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03448275862 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12723434224 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364159080458 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440686943163 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988602880093 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557526908669 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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