Some people think that children should begin their formal education at an early age and should most of their time on school studies. Others believe that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two views. Which view do you agree with? Why?
Childhood is one of the most important and memorable periods of our lives. We come into the world innocent and unaware and in just a few short years make great physical and mental progress. In my view, there are significant benefits of beginning formal education at an early age such as following: enthusiasm for learning, and social interaction.
First, Children who receive early education will become enthusiastic to learn various skills. They also feel confident and curious, which causes them to perform better in school. Children learn how to manage challenges and be flexible in times of difficulty. Intellectually, the period from birth to six years is the most significant for brain growth. A child who is surrounded by a rich multi-sensory environment develops infinitely more connection between brain cells, which are the basis of what we call “intelligence”. For instance, my niece started school at the age of three. She started showing a huge improvement in her learning approach. Previously she was not that much interested in learning to write, but now mostly she plays with her chalk and blackboard. Her handwriting improved a lot. If she did not attend early school, then her writing skill would get delayed.
Socially, being in a school environment teaches children both how to behave themselves and how to get along with other children and adults. These lessons in human behavior are as important as the formal subjects a child must study. For example, my friend, Ankita has a two years old daughter, Diya. Her daughter has stranger anxiety. Always, Ankita was not able to attend the social gatherings because of her daughter. Ankita started her daughter’s school and we saw a significant difference in Diya’s behavior. In starting, Diya struggled a lot in school, she was not able to get adjust with classmates and teachers. After some time, she learned ethics of behavior, also how to mingle with the sounding people.
In conclusion, early education offers children a lot of benefits at different levels. A child can always play after coming home; in the meantime, the school experience sets the child on a path to success and self-confidence in a competitive, demanding world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 335, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Always' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
...iya. Her daughter has stranger anxiety. Always, Ankita was not able to attend the soci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1870.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18005540166 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07424067325 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590027700831 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5195475203 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.3043478261 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6956521739 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30434782609 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161111716823 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450248562109 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415653693496 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990846520685 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0180053804554 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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