Do you agree or disagree with the statement that the government should do to improve the health care to clean the environment?
The government should be responsible to give its citizen shelters, education facilities, and work. Among all these responsibilities, a government should also step up efforts to upgrade the healthcare for its citizens. I believe that government should clean the environment to improve people’s health. I will elaborate on my reasons in the ensuing paragraphs.
First, water is the main source for spreading disease in the communities. If the government tries to give clean water to people, then they will not get sick very often. People not only drink water every day, but they use it for many purposes like cooking, washing clothes, etc. The government has created an organization who check the water purity. Water is not only the problem, today, but people also do not even get clean air. Today, we see industries all over the places. They are not properly discarding their west. All industries produce a different type of west. If it is not discarded properly then it pollutes air and water. A government should regulate industries which exert an important influence on people’s health. Massive industries often release poisonous gasses in the air, and to handle this situation, governments should set up regulations for these industries to decrease their pollutants.
Second, cleaning the environment is not enough but governments should also create awareness in people about the benefits of a clean environment. Make pure environment is not one day job, it requires long duration and a lot of effort. If the government give education to the people, then this work becomes a lot easier for the government. For instance, Delhi has so much air pollution and because of that road traffic accidents had increased in recent years. In this case, people started carpooling to reduce traffic and air pollution in Delhi. Moreover, cleaning environment is not only governments responsibility, but people should also take part in this action. If all people start growing trees, reduce energy consumption, reduce air pollution. All those efforts put a huge impact on protecting the environment.
Let’s put in a nutshell, if the government spend millions of dollars annually to buy equip hospitals, laboratories, but the environment is not clean then there no use of all those facilities. Therefore, I strongly believe that the government should clean environment first to improve citizens’ health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 588, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...eover, cleaning environment is not only governments responsibility, but people should also ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 8.0752688172 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32984293194 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04158742723 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51832460733 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1141805783 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.44 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.28 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228785613912 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069097589302 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905652260542 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165077332306 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495445597382 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.04 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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