Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Human activity is making the earth a worse place to live. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny the fact that with the quick development of modern technology our society had changed the way of living and interacting. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely agree with the fact that our actions have a detrimental impact on our ever-day lives. It is my belief that our place to live has worsened because of our industrial achievements for a number of reasons and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, I strongly believe that the quality of our life is threatened by our behavior because, statistically talking we can see how polluted and dirty has become our environment. The level of green gas emissions had considerably increased with the development of factories and commercial companies. Moreover, with the increased number of robots and electrical machines, globalization extended even more and as a result, this had worsened the life conditions on our planet and caused a large spectrum of health problems. I have to admit that my own opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. Fifty years ago, my mother`s friend, Lucy who was born in Ukraine had the bad luck to assist to the catastrophic nuclear accident that happened in Chelyabinsk. Consequently, the next day after the horrible event she was evacuated into another city, losing all of her personal things. In fact, this was nothing compared to the long run effects that occurred later on in her life: after five years she was diagnosed with a terrible disease that could not allow her to have kids. This had severely impacted her existence and since then she is extremely sad and has no happiness in her life. For this reason, I can strongly conclude that our actions have an awful impact on our lives, because right now Lucy has to deal with the consequences of what happened long ago in history and which was caused by our actions.
Secondly, we as society, contributed to the development of internet and this made us to become extremely lonely people. Moreover, these days we prefer to relax alone and entertain ourself by watching movies which has also negative effects on our communication skills. Furthermore, our relationships with our family and close friends had worsened since the introduction of mass media applications such as Instagram or Facebook. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. Two years ago, me and my best friend got into a fight because of lack of communication about a polemic subject that we discussed using WhatsApp. As a result, we had not been talking to each other during six months and consequently we got depressed and sad. Had we talked about this controversial social issue in real life, explaining our emotions by gestures and mimics we would not have been emotionally exhausted and we would have been even more united.
It is certainly clear to see that our actions have fewer positive effects on our lives because we had become less social and our environment had to suffer terrible consequences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
...re forced to choose, I would definitely agree with the fact that our actions have a detrimental impact o...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd we would have been even more united. It is certainly clear to see that our ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, as to, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2519.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9489194499 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87498631237 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524557956778 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 802.8 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.098175142 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.95 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.45 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0530694987092 0.236089414692 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0197094169137 0.076458572812 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.022290333603 0.0737576698707 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0415348302804 0.150856017488 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316337163951 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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