Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Is it true that people should hold on to the opportunity to get a secure job? When it comes to the question of immediate or waiting, the answer differs from individual to individual. Some are adamant that people should accept the job immediately, while others squarely hold the opposite statement. Both statements are convincing and stand on points, yet my experience and real-life examples lead me to conclude that grapple the chance of a job is important. More reasons and examples will be shed light on as follows.
To begin with, people need money to live, and a secure job can make people rely on themselves immediately. For instance, in this society of high products' prices, it is hard for people who don't have the salary to live by themselves. To be more specific, house rent in Taiwan is too expensive for freshman people who just graduated from colleges and universities. Many of them need to rely on their family to maintain their lives. Therefore, they prefer to find a job quickly so that they will not rely on their parents. On the contrary, if people wait for a job they are more satisfied, they can't promise when they can find it. Hence, their parents are forced not to retire to help them.
In addition, it is pivotal for people to maintain their reputation, and a secure job can achieve this goal. For example, many Taiwanese are concerned about whether people have jobs because they consider it is a symbol of the ability to maintain a family. Thus, people are usually apt to accept the job opportunity when it comes. In contrast, although people who don't have jobs are responsible and keep finding jobs they really satisfied with, their parents and relatives will see them as unresponsible and lazy to find a job. As a result, people should get a secure job to avoid their reputation being damaged.
Last but not least, chance is important for people, and a secure job provides this opportunity. Take me as an example, I am just graduated from college, and lack of working experience is my disadvantage, while many famous cooperations prefer to give the job to people who already work experience. That is to say, if I can have an opportunity to work, it is essential for me to catch this chance to improve my work experience. By contrast, if I don't grip this opportunity, it will become hard for me to find my next job. As a result, a secure job should be seized.
In conclusion, people should take the job right away. Money, reputation, and chance is indispensable for people to choose the job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, really, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68623024831 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69194149769 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453724604966 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4689309842 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4583333333 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45833333333 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379381647391 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13010035212 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781453259213 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24459691464 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496904057207 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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