Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country
There is no doubt that advertisements play the prominent role through the people’s behavior. No one can deny the impacts of advertising on people's life. Throughout the history, all companies have utilized advertisement to introduce food which affects people's health. A debating question raised related to the issue is that how much effect advertisement has on the healthy eating habits. Some people may hold this viewpoint that advertisement has many negative effects on people's eating habits. However, others take the opposite viewpoint. In my perspective, the first belief is true. I will pinpoint some of outstanding reasons.
One of the most important reason coming mind related to the statement is that scarcely, healthy food used to be advertised. This means that advertisement often includes fast food like sandwich due to the fact that this type of food prepare quickly. Indeed, people incline to spend more money and live easy day by day. People tend to spend much less time to prepare and eat food, especially in the workplace in order to have more time to perform their works. Consequently, when fast food which one needs less time to prepare it, is advertised through the TV, newspapers, Journals or other social networks, people convince to employ it because of mentioned reason, although they are harmful to their health and have a drastic effect on their healthy eating habits.
Furthermore, the equally important reason supported my idea is that advertisement prevent people to perform works correctly. For instance, when one person, especially a child, sits in front of the television at dinner time and the advertisement about a pleasured game or animation was revealed through the TV, it brings about child eats dinner without good chowing as soon as possible due to the fact that his concentration is evolved to advertisement. Moreover, the lack of beneficial advertisement related to the healthy eating habit causes people force to believe unhealthy food. An empirical test conducted in Asia clearly demonstrate that through the last decade, the inhospitable program about food make people become fatter and careless about eating habits. This can be a great and convincing reason to accept the harmful influence of advertising on people's eating habit.
From what has been mentioned above, if one weighs merits and demerits of advertising through the people's healthy eating habits, he can safely reach this conclusion that it has the vast negative effects. It is hard to disguise the fact that, good advertisement can help people to improve their health and eating habits in a convenient way. Despite of this fact, advertisement is harmful. All in all, it is anticipated that, if the methods and contents of advertisement do not change, people's health and eating habits will be endangered.
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Message: Did you mean 'employing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: employing
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Message: Did you mean 'believing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: believing
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Message: Consider replacing "in a convenient way" with adverb for "convenient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... improve their health and eating habits in a convenient way. Despite of this fact, advertisement is...
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Suggestion:
...h and eating habits will be endangered.
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'for instance', 'no doubt']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.255445544554 0.229887763892 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.168316831683 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0970297029703 0.0866891130778 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.039603960396 0.046263068375 86% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0316831683168 0.0685040099705 46% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112871287129 0.118717715034 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0455445544554 0.0351676179071 130% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8588943668 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0415841584158 0.0309702414327 134% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0930693069307 0.0887237588012 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0138613861386 0.0209618222197 66% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0138613861386 0.0139019557991 100% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2824.0 2387.08602151 118% => OK
No of words: 453.0 408.028673835 111% => OK
Chars per words: 6.23399558499 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.408388520971 0.338922669872 120% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.304635761589 0.251872472559 121% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.185430463576 0.174417080927 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.132450331126 0.112833075102 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8588943668 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525386313466 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 61.1220758795 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5909090909 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1773572892 48.84282405 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.363636364 120.699889404 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5909090909 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.454545454545 0.644075263715 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 51.0544852498 45.7405998639 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.72727272727 1.45489161554 119% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279204672072 0.300154397459 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.110615219826 0.103427244359 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.073849011517 0.0752933317313 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.492653228765 0.497263757937 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.143914677058 0.151897553556 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122646192631 0.114077575197 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646842408835 0.0781384742642 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.427242388504 0.336927656856 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.062733745515 0.067059652881 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215966629517 0.210909579961 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434928036224 0.0618886996521 70% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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