Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country Use specific reasons to support your answer

No one can deny the fact that throughout history, the education system has played a pivotal role in the country’s development. On that ground, due to it’s paramount importance, the education system has been constantly making efforts to make a better change in the whole system. In this regard, some people contend that education is the most significant factor of the successful development country. On the other side, there is a group of people who take is as an exaggeration, and posit that there are other crucial factors what have ability to grow a country. Certainly, from my vantage point, the former view contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.

The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that irrefutably, young generation represent the country over the globe and it is knows as the pillor of the country. Consequently, providing them the best education is every school’s redimentary responsibility. In fact, one ways of doing is hiring the best teachers for students since active involvement of teachers in student’s education can make them extraordinary intelliegent. To shed more light on it, my own life example is utterly a compelling example of what has mentioned above. I have studied in one of the highly reputed schoold in my country. I would say that students who graduated from my batch were all in good position in their carrer. The reason behind it was our school used to make extra efforts to provide a higher education whereby students were educated through a renowed national and international professors for every subjects which not only provided us a high-quality education but also sprouted seeds in out mind to think differently to other students who studied in ordinary schools. Ultimately, it is wise to say that it unlikely that simple and ordinary school was ever able to provided me such an exeptional and astonoshing knowledge in my life.

Another noteworthy reason is that the country will never stand out and will not get a chance to make big process at international level without modern innovation and advanced technology. Indeed, schools will make that happend by serving high-tech education system to students. Apparently, students would learn up-to-date inofrmation and gain the best experience in these schools rather than other schools which still stick with the old education system. To exemplify, nowadays modern schools are more focused to serve practical knoweldge simultaneously with theortical subjects. In fact, students get chance to experiments their knoweldge in the real field with real objects which aid them enrich their understanding more a subject. Besides, they learn various international languages like Spanish, France, English, and etc. Eventough parents might need to spend higher fees in order to educate their schildren in such schools, it is a worth investment for children’s bright future. Admittedly, when the government invest money and energy in improving schools, they builld a better future for their young generation.

To recapitulate, from contemplating all remarks, inspite of the fact that few people may not agree with my viewpoint, I implicitly agreed that in the successful development of country, improving schools is mendatory factor because education will supply the most precious knowldge to their students which are the future of country’s own development. Additionally, highly qualified teachers could actively and passively make an efforts to provide the best education in the school.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one way', 'a way', or simply 'ways'?
Suggestion: one way; a way; ways
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...anguages like Spanish, France, English, and etc. Eventough parents might need to spend h...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an effort' or simply 'efforts'?
Suggestion: an effort; efforts
...chers could actively and passively make an efforts to provide the best education in the sc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, consequently, first, if, may, so, still, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.0752688172 322% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3026.0 1977.66487455 153% => OK
No of words: 565.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35575221239 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96481573657 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 299.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529203539823 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 923.4 618.680645161 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.3618499654 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.083333333 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5416666667 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148748359017 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041049221029 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05023529445 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109745990356 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526597168195 0.0645574589148 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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