Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country.
Compared to previous decades, today’s world is more competitive than ever it was. All countries try to develop at a fast pace by improving different aspects. Among the countries, there is a controversial debate over the most prominent factor in successful development. In my opinion, schools are the most integral factor, and any other element cannot replace their pivotal effect. There are plenty of reasons to support my viewpoint, two of which will be explored in the following paragraphs.
First, a developed country needs wise people. While people do not learn enough about themselves and their society, they cannot contribute to the community's growth and development. In other words, schools should lay the groundwork for further jobs. A successful development hinges on the people. It is impossible to develop while the majority of the population is not ready for it. And it is the school's duty to prepare people for such significant changes. Lately, I read an article that emphasized when the people are not ready for development, the population will reject the development implemented by governments after a while.
Moreover, one aspect of successful development is that people work efficiently. I firmly believe people can work efficiently when they like their jobs. One of the biggest problems of my country, Iran, is that people are not in their suitable positions and that is because of a major drawback in schools' systems. It is schools' duty to find students' aptitudes and help them foster their talents and become professionals. This is possible only with an improved system of schools. The lack of such good schools harms society by accidentally placing people in different occupations. For instance, whenever I see one of my cousins, I regret what he is doing now. He was a talented painter who won many prizes in inter-school competitions. He gradually chose to study civil engineering because what he needed to follow his painting career was not ready. So, instead of a good painter, my country has a medium engineer. The progress of a nation can only occur when people are in the right place.
In conclusion, I believe without a good school system it is impossible to have a successful development. A country should try its best at schools to find students' latent talents even in the remotest villages.
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Suggestion: schools'; school's
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Suggestion:
...my cousins I regret what he is doing now He was a talented painter who won many p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96083550914 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79575339989 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514360313316 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 383.0 20.1344086022 1902% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1900.0 100.406767564 1892% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 383.0 20.6045352989 1859% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 95.0 5.45110844103 1743% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254818876574 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.254818876574 0.076458572812 333% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166223773328 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453780679998 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 193.4 11.7677419355 1643% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -317.27 58.1214874552 -546% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 152.7 10.1575268817 1503% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.97 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.18 8.01818996416 327% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 10.002688172 550% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 155.2 10.0537634409 1544% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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