Since our world is evolving rapidly, it is essential to find a way whether to learn a wide variety of academic subjects or only one. Personally, I believe that burying myself in one field, which I am interested in, can evoke a sense of satisfaction. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, we can get motivated, as we do something that engages our interest. In my opinion, the fundamental factor in every sphere is motivation. Therefore, absorbing a single subject is very crucial to maintain work and life balance. My uncle's experience is a compelling example of this. He was a devotee of art, especially painting. Many people protested to him because as a profit from painting is unpredictable, the future of my uncle appeared to be uncertain. In spite of their protests, he learned all about the specific type of art, instead of having a broad knowledge of other subjects. After several years, my father's brother exhibited his works of art, which brought him fame and wealth. My uncle has been being happy since he opted for single one subject. I cannot imagine if he chose more than one field, what would happen.
Secondly, assimilating much information in a major can increase the possibilities of being in work. Since the vast majority of employers is seeking specialists, people, who learnt a subject in-depth, can succeed in getting a job. Furthermore, masters of the field can become competitive in job marketing, instead of learners of different subjects. For instance, a man majored in mathematics at a pedagogical university. He understands deeply all concepts of both pedagogy and math. To my way fo thinking, any school accepts him willingly because as the man assimilated his subject, he can teach students in many methods. This enhances their potential for progression to further or higher education, leading to attracting more pupils to the school. As we can see, a teacher's knowledge brings popularity not only to him but also the school can benefit. Therefore, masters of one subject can find a job easily or avoid the risk of redundancy, if the school restructures, downsizes or outsources its workforce. Whereas, people who obtain many topics can face these problems.
To sum up, I feel strongly that absorbing one subject is more preparable rather than broaden knowledge of diverse spheres. This is because with it we can feel satisfied and because the chance of being in employment can be high.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... downsizes or outsources its workforce. Whereas, people who obtain many topics can face...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, for instance, i feel, first of all, in my opinion, in spite of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95432692308 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90927659417 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579326923077 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.1525720296 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.44 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.64 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177538733156 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446120868579 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473914019262 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112300890827 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197797915614 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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