do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to take risks and explore new things when you are older than when you are young.
Taking risks and doing new things helps individuals to get rid of the monotony of life. People of different ages sometimes bother themselves by doing new activities. However, there is a controversy as to weather, it is better for elders than youngsters to take risks or not. I, personally, believe that older ones should avoid taking risks or doing new activities, for two main reasons that I will elaborate on which in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, taking risks or doing new activities deprive elders of having relief and calm which are the most important requirements in their lives. It is crystal clear that taking risks is a double-edges sword. Therefore, although people who do new things or experience risky activities are likely to achieve something, it is highly probable that they lose all their possessions in the blink of an eye. Therefore, thinking about the consequences puts a lot of stress and tension on old people that they cannot withstand. When they take risks or do some adventurous, their minds become totally busy and it is not good for their mental health. A personal example can derive this notion home. When my uncle was retired, he decided to hold a factory. When he was managing the affairs, he was under a lot of pressure. Then, soon after, he lost his mental balance. Had not my uncle done something new, he would have had his mental health and stood happy for the rest of life.
Second, some qualities such as active mind, creativity, and strength are prerequisite of being successful in new and risky activities. When people want to do something new they should collect an assortment of information, and they have to put an immense amount of energy and effort in order to do that. For example, if someone wants to attend a new job, before everything he should enhance his knowledge in that area. Obviously, older people’s minds do not have the productivity of youngsters, so they cannot make true decisions in critical moments. Moreover, people who want to take risks also need physical ability because they need to spend time on such activities. For example, if an old man decides to climb Everest, it would be an inappropriate choice for him because not only due to lack of creativity he might not read the map meticulously during the climbing, but it also is possible that he hurt himself seriously that it is not irreparable at these ages.
To sum it up, with taken two mentioned reasons into account, I do believe that old people should avoid taking risks because not only they need tranquillity at these ages, but also owing to the lack of mental and physical abilities they are less likely to be successful in such risky activities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, as to, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80993520518 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68106512811 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516198704104 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.6089194293 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.047619048 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0476190476 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191286196321 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651365215698 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050635491571 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130942016052 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654671769772 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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