Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
In sophisticated today’s world, choosing a career is an indispensable part of everybody’s life. All parents consider their children’s future and try to guide them to be successful. Some people think children should choose the same job as their parents. On the other hand, others stand on the other side of the continuum, believing that the children should choose their job independently. I, personally, subscribe to the latter group for a couple of reasons, which are elaborated upon hereunder.
First and foremost, psychologically speaking, passion and talent are the two most important factors in someone’s prosperity. Some people think that the ones who make fewer mistakes in their job are more successful. Therefore, they suggest that the children attend to their parents because in this way children can use parent’s experiences while they are underestimating the influence of willingness on the individual’s success. Parents should unearth the talents and interests of their children and encourage them to find their ways. Choosing careers without paying attention to personal desires have some demerit; All people pass a large part of their life at work. So, when they are reluctant about their vocation, it would be too tedious for them. Also, despite the possibility of making a mistake, those who are passionate about their job are more innovative and creative which brings about flourish and drive a great sense of satisfaction in their jobs.
Second, doing a similar job with parents can adversely affect the relation between family members. When parents are proficient in their business and have experienced up and down of their careers, they unconsciously tend to prevent their children from making a mistake. In this vein, children do not have a sense of freedom that causes demanding disputations between them which they did not use to have them before. Additionally, they may have some controversial discussions over the financial aspect of the job. Some parents think because of the intellectual and financial assistance that they offer their children, children owe them and they should compensate their parent’s favor in another way. A personal example can derive this notion home; because my cousin was working with his father in his company, his father expected that he not to leave home after his marriage to take care of him and it blemished their relation.
All in all, with all two mentioned reasons into account, I vehemently assert that children should choose their job independently. Because in this way not only do they have a chance to find the most appropriate job according to their talents and interests, but also they can have a smooth relation with their parents forever.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 391, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...tations between them which they did not use to have them before. Additionally, they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2356979405 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86518960261 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519450800915 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4452052372 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.4 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.85 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381952137756 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131300747469 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782683532308 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277460882963 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019805831988 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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