In some countries people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you agree or disagree?
Governors always are thinking about the ways that they can improve life quality of citizens effectively; one of these ways is enacting proper regulations in order to prevent people from doing some activities such as smoking, drinking alcohol, or inappropriate clothing in the public places. When it comes to smoking, some people believe that people should be allowed to smoke wherever they want. However, others think smoking in the public places should be banned. I, personally, concur with the latter group for two main reasons that I will elaborate on in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, passing some strict rules about smoking, governors can boost the health situation of the society. Smokers during smoking emit a wide variety of toxic components into the air. Scientific studies have shown that there is a significant correlation between smoking and some severe diseases such as cancer, asthma, and cardiovascular diseases. Not only do the smokers hurt their health body dramatically, but they also threaten the health of people who are exposed with their burning cigarette. Therefore, it is very important to impede individuals from smoking in the public places or closed spaces because they injure not only themselves but also everyone around them. One of my workmates suffered from respiratory disease. On the other hand, our clients always were smoking in our room. Then, his health situation gradually got worse, and he could not come to the office anymore. Hence, I think prohibiting smoking can be an effective step into the enhancement of people’s health.
Second, youngsters and children are extremely susceptible and they can be easily influenced by older ones. When youngsters in the park, offices, banks, or other public places see adults smoking, an inclination to smoke will arises in them. The less exposed to the smokers a young one is, the less penchant to smoking he has. Therefore, in order to enrich culture and encourage people to avoid such an irritating behavior, the government should ban the smoking in the society. To elucidate on, the statistic studies have shown that in the societies which smoking is restricted, new generation are less likely to be addicted when they become adults.
In conclusion, taking all information mentioned above into account, I believe that people should not be allowed to smoking in the public places. In this way, not only do people protect their health efficiently, but their children have less temptation to smoke in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 11, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are always
Governors always are thinking about the ways that they can i...
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Line 5, column 773, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'were'.
Suggestion: were always
...disease. On the other hand, our clients always were smoking in our room. Then, his health s...
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Line 7, column 225, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'arise'
Suggestion: arise
...s smoking, an inclination to smoke will arises in them. The less exposed to the smoker...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23703703704 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68649010438 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538271604938 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8183365229 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.05 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219347491172 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676111138557 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501402820645 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15020839245 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346332002778 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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