Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is a growing trend that people are getting interested in global news. Some people state that people ought to have a better understanding of the situation in the world, whereas others disagree with this opinion. I agree with the latter view for the following reasons.
To begin with, this would put additional pressure on students. College students have a lot to do in their studies and their schedules are extremely tight. For example, medical students are not only obliged to learn their major subject but also need to be involved in internships in hospitals, which will lead to spending hectic lives. If they are forced to catch up what is going on around the world, they do not have enough time to concentrate on their duties. Therefore, information collection could serve as distraction for youngsters.
Second, this could lead to unnecessary costs for people who are searching for information. To grasp the latest news, people need to invest their cash in broadcasting services such as CNN and BBC. My experience is a compelling example of what I mean. When I conducted research in my Ph.D. thesis, registration of social network services is integral to reach information, which required 100 dollars a month. Since the fee is not reasonable, I had to cut a living expense to compensate for the significant outcome. Furthermore, I could not afford to pay my tuition in the following year. Imagine that everyone needed to consume their precious budgets to pursue their curiosity, what a mess would be.
Admittedly, knowing incidents occurring in foreign countries does have merits. For instance, when I go to college, I invested my budget in stocks as a daily routine. Upheaval stock prices could be predicted thanks to references from all over the world. However, this information might be based on misleading evidence and we are frequently betrayed. Therefore, this is not a compelling theory to prove that information gathering performs positively.
In conclusion, given that understanding the world situation has a significantly unacceptable impact on our lives, we would better off focusing on news that is something to do with our lives.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, i mean, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1388101983 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92603707694 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592067988669 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.847605509 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.380952381 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8095238095 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0994319357564 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289039722922 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359821512738 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0588239609462 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295860241538 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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