Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The era itself is undergoing a period where everyone around the world has easy access to others due to development. Despite the close connection of the entire human race, some people still state that it is not worthwhile to know about influential events around the world for the reason that they are unlikely to affect daily life. However, from my perspective, I firmly claim that people should still pay attention to what is going on at every corner of the earth.
For one thing, people, defined as social creatures, can never assert that the exsiting world incidents have nothing to do with them. The fact is that to some extent people are susceptible to every judgement and every military action occurring in the world. Prices of cereal, say, can drastically soar due to the impacts of the last war far away in the Western world.It is absurd for those who justify their indifference and igonorance to the social incident to draw such a conclusion that their daily life cannot be affected. Besides, the world is getting tightly connected with dramatic economic and technological progress, which in turn strengthens the abovementioned effect that human beings are more susceptible to the incidents around the world.
Furthermore, it is critical for citizens, especially the youngesters to establish value system when endeavouring to explore the truth. To be more specific, citizens witness the hazardous environmental contamination and hardship and suffering of people in the impoverished area, after which they realize the grave situation this generation is facing and the realistic tragedies taking place simultaneously when the rich are incontent with the luxury they possess. The truth behind indicates so severe a contrast that it strikes the majority who are conscientious not to drift with the tide and cherish what they already reach.My sister, for instance, who is also deeply moved when she reads about the terrible diseases that the African children are suffering, determined herself to become a doctor in the future to cure sickness and relieve pains. Had it not been for the wills to know the other side of the earth, there would have been less selfless people, like my sister, to dedicate themselves to the society.
Nevertheless, a voice rises that it may stimulates negative attitudes towards the society and even resulted in crimes. Admittedly, when reflecting on some incidents, public can be cynical about the world. However, so-called negative emotions, by contrast, play the important role of helping the society to realize the potential problems and contributing to better development of society. In a nutshell, due to the reason that people are related to the events happening and through observing them this generation form healthy characters, I firmly insist that we should care about the current events happening.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, while, for instance, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2392.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22270742358 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7982817601 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572052401747 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 750.6 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.2380285107 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.466666667 100.406767564 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5333333333 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191354514397 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578548664681 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590232000036 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112470404025 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406425936792 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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