Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Entertainment has already become an indispensible part of the era, where people become over entusiastic about the privacy of the celebrity. Some justify their behavior by claiming that famous entertainers and antheletes cannot have sufficient privacy due to their special occupation traits. However, such excuses can just exacerbate the graving situation. As far as I am concerned, people, including those who enjoy fame and reputation, deserve to enjoy high level of privacy protection especially in the time of big data, three reasons of which are of great siginifance and will be discussed as followed.
First and foremost, it is undeniable that some has gone to extremes that they insist that every detailed aspect of celebrity' life should be in the limelight, consequence of which could be hazardous. Report has it that many stars are constantly troubled by the frequent disturbance of the crazy fans and annoying reporters. Chances are that when they are at a private family reunion, the next day the contact information of their parents and chirldren could be known to public. The situation deteriorates when such hazardous behaviours even grow into a dark industry and business. It is declosed by some female actors that many of them have been ever threatened with their so-called porny and secret pictures which could be taken in a unimaginable manner, say, the tiny camera set in the hotel room. It pains me to admit that our current level of privacy protection is far from satisfactory.
Furthermore, full and equal protection should be the basic moral and pursuit of a morden society, where everyone should be guarded regardless of their professions. The pathetic truth is that public, who are all, to some extent, troubled by leak of personal information, in turn claim that the protection of celecrity's privacy should be inperior to that of common people. Such viewpoint simply just the worsens the already toxic environment of privacy protection, which could be reflected in every suffering of privacy leak of the superstars. Take the example of my favourite Korean group Twice as an example, one member of which,Nayeon has been troubled by silimilar situation. Since 2016, Nayeon has been harrassed by the German twins, who got Nayeon's specific location and personal information from social media as well as some illegal channels. However, due to the tolerance of the corporation and public's statement that idols are a special carrer that will naturally lack some privacy protection, it eventually resulted in tremendous theat to Nayeon's life and family, tragedy of which ended by psychological diseases of Nayeon.
Nevertheless, a voice still arises that public figure has to sacrafice some extent of privacy as they acquire numerous benefits from their current carreer. Ironically, whether celebrity obtain incomes due to their appearance in front of public, which I take leave to doubt, is yet under debate. Many famous actors and sport stars achive huge success for the reason that their professional ability surpass most of that of others and stand out in the entire field. To put it another way, not everyone who has access to public can success regardlessly. Moreover, as I mentioned before, it is absurb to justify some evil behaviors simply in that those who suffering from those are enjoying a better life. It is important for us to be cautious of the potential malice to the successful buried in our mind.
In a nutshell, I firmly stand that famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, well, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 34.0 11.0286738351 308% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2984.0 1977.66487455 151% => OK
No of words: 579.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15371329879 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90534594407 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80013452685 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52677029361 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 944.1 618.680645161 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.4124138209 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.739130435 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1739130435 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95652173913 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0946703382216 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0275636855594 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0335139923431 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0706670812933 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485230673342 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 169.0 86.8835125448 195% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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