Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
It is undeniable that world has become very sophisticated. Although it seems like a non-realistic opinion in a glance, I strongly believe that every tiny event in one corner of the world might have effects on the rest of the world. These effects have two different aspects, some of them are positive and some are negative. For being able to avoid drawbacks and also take advantages of its benefits, people should be aware of events happening surrounding the world. In what follows, I intelligibly support the stated position by giving some reasonable justifications.
First of all, connections between all nations are stronger than the past and also people in all around the world have very relationships with each other, so our daily life may be affected by a little event in a very far distance. For instance, our generation has experienced very dramatic days due to the pandemic outbreak of Coronavirus disease (COVID-19). This disease began in one of the China’s cities; at first, it does not seem that it has effects on other countries but the illness was spread very fast and made some serious consequences for all people all around the world. Thus, every detail which has a tiny effect on a human’s life, could affect all nations’ daily life, therefore knowing about events that happen anywhere is of paramount importance to every individual.
Secondly, each event that happens all around the world has some negative and positive aspects; entrepreneurs see events optimistically and they try to transform each occurrence to a great economic opportunity. For instance, although Corona disease had catastrophic effects on the all people’s life, entrepreneurs transformed it to an economic chance and try to enterprise companies to make medical requirements to eradicate the illness. Not only do they make a huge economic benefit, but also they have done their moral responsibilities. So, by being aware of happening events all around the world, not only we can prevent its negative aspects, but also we can make economic profits and do our ethical duties.
To recap the main points, based on my own experiences, although some may oppose, every individual should consciously follow each occurrence in every corner of the world due to the fact that every minute event comes with its opportunities and obstacles which might have a huge impact on the life of all human beings.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0943877551 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89477652015 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520408163265 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.1222265865 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.642857143 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216340740357 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757805550391 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062176386932 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126111032861 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403848936602 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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