TPO48 - Independent Writing
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is undeniable that life has become more sophisticated nowadays. People has encountered with so many events in daily life; each situation comes with its opportunities and obstacles, needless to say that overcoming these events is difficult. For taking the maximum possible advantages and avoiding the drawbacks, people should be aware of happenings’ consequences and equipped with planning and organizing skills. I what follows, I will explain the importance of planning to take the most advantages and avoid negative aspects of each.
First of all, individuals should be aware of each occurrence in their society and daily life. They should survey their weakness and make plans to turn them into their strength if it is possible, and if not, they should plan to avoid them. For instance, my generation has experienced dramatic days due to the pandemic outbreak of Coronavirus disease; many people have suffered from the illness and just one group of society’s members have not wounded because they observed the situation carefully and made a plan to avoid this lethal virus. Thus, for avoiding negative aspects of each event people should have a plan.
Secondly, people should consciously observe each event and identify the strength points of each occurrence. If they organize to get knowledge about each events, they will be able to gain the most possible benefits from that event by devise a plan. For example, although the pandemic had catastrophic effects on many individual’s life, those who were optimistic, after surveying precisely, transformed the dramatic event to an economic opportunity and gained a huge amount of money. Not only did they take economic benefits, but also they performed their humanitarian duties. Therefore, having organization and planning abilities causes people to obtain maximum profits from each event.
To recap the main points, based on my own experiences, although some may oppose, having planning ability not only leads people to acquire many benefits from happenings, but also causes people to avoid drawbacks of each occurrence. So, I strongly believe that planning and organizing abilities are of the paramount importance to youths for living in today’s world.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38547486034 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82684324406 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54748603352 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6187451304 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.533333333 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8666666667 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160579021954 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681475291261 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418631155486 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113408293383 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.01523600411 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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