Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Surfing on the Internet, Clicking on the mouse, a great amount of information will display on our computer screen within seconds, which means we, young adults, can receive the latest news way easier than people who lived in the 60s. Some people believe they only need to know some information which is relevant to their daily life. However, I think it is important to know about events even if it will not likely to affect our daily life. My reasons are as follows.
Firstly, it is hard to tell which events will affect our daily life simply because we cannot predict the future. Steve Jobs, the former CEO of the apple company, made a well-known speech at the graduation ceremony of Standford University, saying that we should connect the dots. He mentioned that during his college life, he showed no interest in the courses in his major but was devoted himself to all kinds of activities related to calligraphy. These events didn't affect his college life at all because he did not end up as a calligrapher. However, years after he left the university, the knowledge that he learned from the lectures helps him create the most elegant fonts in the Mac, which made him a successful artist and leader of Apple. Accordingly, it is difficult to distinguish which events around the world will affect our daily life, it might be useful in the future when you connect the dots.
Secondly, even some activities happening around the world seem not affecting your present daily life, they will still have some potential influence on you. For example, I heard the news about the Iraq wars on TV around 2005. How could a war which happened over 2000 miles away affect my daily life? No doubt I still waked up as usual and dealt with my daily affairs. Yet my father is a huge fan of politics who is willing to watch International news all day long. Thus, I noticed the real-time news by listening to the sounds coming from the TV. After several days, my father told me he made a great deal of money by investing the gold. "If there's a war, there's always a demand for more golds, which means people are seeking a safe investment. All of these lead to a surge in the gold price." I always remember my father told me so at that time. At last, I realize that there is no such thing that irrelevant to our daily life. We all live in the Earth village and everything will affect our life, obviously or potentially.
In sum, as the reasons I mentioned above, I strongly support we should know events happening in this world even if it's unlikely to affect our daily life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, even so, for example, i think, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60130718954 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42093126662 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533769063181 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6831830986 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8636363636 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77272727273 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283564848603 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087028368306 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985633680073 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196668633043 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567357481 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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