Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is hard to deny that parents always will be there to offer their children guidance to help them plan and organize schedules, and such a fact may mislead some impressionable people to generate the idea that young people do not need the ability of planning since parents will settle everything for them. However, such a statement suffers both logical and factual fallacies and it need to be examined meticulously. As far as three factors below are concerned, I strongly hold that it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
First and foremost, young people need to plan and organize their working path. That is to say youngsters have to be more careful when choosing majors because there are plenty of new majors emerging since the 21st century. Take the case of my friend Jane, one of the typical Chinese university students, as an example. Jane's parent both graduated from high school and they needn't worry about the future because governments will offer work for them in that time. However, things are quite different nowadays for two reasons. Today the numbers of college students are way more than 90s or 80s, which causes governments cannot assign jobs to corresponding students. Jane needs to be better able to plan and organize for her future instead of waiting for being hired by elite companies. Consequently, She took part in some career fairs in order to send her resumes to those elite leading companies. Had it not been for Jane's highly focus on her working career, She would never become a employee in a leading IT companies in silicon valley.
Furthermore, young people need to organize their financial plan. Nowadays high price of real estate become a heavy burden on young people's shoulders. Imagine that if people have no financial plan and squander their money every month, the only result must be they do not have adequate money to pay for their first house. For example, the average house price in Beijing is over 50,000 Yuan per square meter yet the average working salary for people who just graduated is only around 10,000. There is no doubt that the young generation are destined to save money for a long time before being able to afford a house. Yet in the old times, people barely worry about house due to the simplicity of the social structure and housing policy. In the pass, even for people who do not have a financial plan to save money regularly, they still are able to acquire a loan from banks to cover the low house price. There is no doubt that the new generation need to be more organized.
In a nutshell, I maintain that it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. Admittedly, as my favorite quote from James Madison goes, as long as the reason of man continues fallible, different opinions will be formed, and some people my oppose me. However, I believe they will compromise after being exposed to my article.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: needn't
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... working career, She would never become a employee in a leading IT companies in s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, for example, no doubt, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2416.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75590551181 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42184552164 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503937007874 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1245190307 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.043478261 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0869565217 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34782608696 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225547440241 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738036167053 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740943172387 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151574465599 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381565176683 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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