Do you agree or disagree that people will learn more if they travel to foreign country instead of travelling inside their country.
With the accelerating development of modern technology such as airplanes and high-speed trains, travelling abroad becomes a common activity for people in the 21st century. However, there's an ongoing and violent debate that whether folks benefit more if they travel to a foreign country instead of choosing travelling in their own country. From my prospective, I agree the statement that individuals will experience and benefit more if they travel abroad. The reasons and explanations are as follows.
First, a term called the Earth village has been invented recently since only couples of hours needed people can fly to anywhere they want. Moreover, there are various different culture existing in this world where we live, waiting for us to explore. For example, if people choose to travel abroad, they can actually experience the life of local folks. When we traveled to Australia last year, plenty runners are running in the natural parks no matter what time is it. And some questions have been raised in our mind at that time, which is that why lots of Australian choose to spend their free time running instead of having a nice relaxation at home. After we talked with some local people, a lesson has been learned that we only live our life once and we should try our best to live a healthy life. this idea is so valuable that it still has a positive influence for my daily life. Just imagine that if I never made a trip to Australia and decide to travel inside my country, the biggest chance is that I might lose this lesson since exercising is not so prevalent in my country result from the daily stress.
Second, not only we can experience the new life style in a foreign country, but also we can pick up a foreign language. there's is no doubts that English is the most common language in this world and we hardly will encounter any difficulties if we can speak English. nevertheless, we can not deny the fact that some people, who don't receive descent education, cannot speak English at all. In this circumstance, if travelers desire a cozy trip, learning some easy-learning and commonly used daily local language comes a necessary need. Yet the best way to grasp a language is not coming from the texture book but talking to a native speaker. Accordingly, travelling abroad would be a beneficial chance to pick up a new language. For instance, Japanese is a language that I always want to learn. Nonetheless it's been a hard time for me to attend a language school since daily work has already devoured my time. but the trip to japan actually makes my goal come true. I picked up some daily conversion of Japanese during the trip to japan. Thus travelling abroad could really benefit a lot.
Conclusively, since the travelling abroad could ensure both a experience for different culture and learning new language, it definitely has more advantages than travelling inside the country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, really, second, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2405.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83903420523 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61898724759 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519114688129 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 763.2 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1039736779 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.208333333 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7083333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276945003368 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764561030698 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925800308024 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216201367528 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105757414802 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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