Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's society, technology is improving at a high pace every day and many people have access to the internet. In this regard, some people believe that the government should dedicate more money to ameliorate the access to the internet rather than spending money on the improvement of public transportation. On the other hand, some might hold the opposite idea. In my view, dedicating more money to facilitate internet access is more beneficial for people. In the following, I will illustrate my reasons.
The main reason why I hold this idea is that the government is able to produce more occupations for the members of society by improving the access to the internet. Alternatively stated, more jobs are prepared for people since they can have better access to the internet and even women who have little children can stay at home and earn money through working on the internet. By the help of technology, many people, especially young people, and juveniles are capable of starting an app or selling hand-made products on the internet. For instance, my sister lives in a city that most of the people have easy access to the internet. she established a public page on instagram and started to sell hand-made dolls. since many people were able to visit her page on instagram, she becomes soon very prosperous and famous. Had not the people of that city had access to the internet, her prosperity was impossible.
Another paramount reason that must be mentioned here is that the government can save the environment in this way. Otherwise stated, when people want to go to their works, they utilize public transportation or most of the times, they take their own vehicles to their offices. These vehicles produce high amounts of carbon dioxide and other detrimental gases that are very harmful to the environment. people who have easy access to the internet are able to stay at home instead of going to an office and remotely handle their jobs. For example, my friend was an employee in a company for several years. Whenever he wanted to reach to his work, he took his car with himself. After a while, the car found some problems and produced more harmful gases and still my friend utilized that car. also, his job gave him this opportunity to stay at home and work on the internet. However, since he had not excellent access to the internet, he had to go to work with his obsolete car. If he had access to the internet, he would not have taken his car to his office and pollute the environment.
To put it briefly, based on what is mentioned before, no one can underestimate the effect of improvement of the access to the internet on people's lives. this amelioration not only influences on society but also on the environment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, however, if, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2269.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79704016913 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65513357041 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463002114165 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3712863389 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5416666667 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7083333333 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45833333333 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22324698819 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676431598769 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777210212769 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156465356093 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809339770115 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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