People today spend a lot of time with their friends, and whether they rather invest their time in making new friends or keeping the older ones depends on thier personality and enviroment. In my opinion, it is more important and beneficial to keep your old friends. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in this essay.
To begin with, old friends can help eachother with life choices better than new friends.They most likely come from one's childhood or the time of youth. Therefore, these old friends have grown up together and evolved into the people they are today. This means childhood friends know each other very well. They know each other's weaknesses, strenght, skills and capabilities. As a result they can help each other with life decisions and problems. I will illustrate my point through an example. When my brother finally managed to get to his dream job, he found himself unsatisfyed dispite spending his whole life to reach that position. He was very confused about whether he should continue working in that position or not. He tried consulting with his coworkers and friends. In the end he confessed that his childhood friend John was the person who helped him make up his mind. John knew my brother so well that he warned him about how he can't continue doing something he doesn't love. On the other hand, My brother's new friends though he could carry on with the unsatisfying job since they saw him as a hardworking person. But John knew he was hardworking up to that point in life, only because he was striving to get something he aspires.
Secondly, the longer you know someone, the more trust you can build with them. keeping old friends, people who are proved to be honest and truthful, can benefit us through adulthood. My personal experience with this, is a strong reason why I feel that keeping older friends is more beneficial that making new ones. I was suddenly asked by my boss to go on a bussines trip to Paris and I desperatly needed some one to take care of my kids. First I tried to ask my coworker ,whom we were also friends outside work, for the faver, but she refused. At the time I didn't know why but later on I found out that she wanted me to fail in finding someone for help so eventually she could go on the Paris trip instead of me. Although, I had trusted this person she didn't hesitate to stab me in the back ,and all because I didn't have enough time to figure out this person's true colors.
In conclusion, I strongly believe one should focus more on keeping a long lasting relationship with her older friends that making new ones. I feel this way because older friends know each other very well and can help each other with life choices, and because they are more trustworthy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, i feel, in conclusion, you know, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2255.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59266802444 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39184697858 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503054989817 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2862899743 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.64 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208470496914 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672601480218 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719509808592 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152538574447 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416108823076 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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