Most people agree that sports and social activities can be as impactful and beneficial in one's life as academic education. In my opinion, these subjects are so important that they should recieve equal attention and financial support as academic education. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore below.
Firstly, doing sports, outdoor activities and group gatherings are proven to significantly increase dopamin release in body, a hormon which is responsible for feelings of joy and pleasure. For a human being to be most productive is best to feel happy and energetic, which can be obtained by activites which release this specific hormon in the body. Therefor colleges and universities should be promoting such activities and providing required equipments so that students can be more productive and as a result progress in thier studies. When I was a university student, I used to find my study sessions way more efficient if I did them after jogging with my friends at campus jogging course. Such an activity was not very time consumig or tiring, instead it would leave me feeling refreshed and ready for an efficaciouse study session. This would have not been achievable if the university hadn't have had the financial ability to build a jogging course.
Secondly, there is so much to learn in social activities that you can't find in any books nor do you percieve in any lectures or classes. Teamwork, patient and flexibility are only three of many skills you can aquire through socialising and can't gain in a library. If one leaves university without thees skills, is subject to failure. For instance, working in big companies require working with numorous people who don't neccesarily share the same way of thinking as you nor do they come from the same background. Therefore, you will need great social skills to be able to compromise and get along with them, otherwise you can't succeed in your job. Students who don't take part in social activities and spend most of thier time studying alone are more prone to this issue.
In coclusion, I strongly believe that sports and social activities deserve equal attention as classes and libraries. This is because these activities make students more productive by making them feel more energetic and make them ready for succeeding in their carrier.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02849740933 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68703309425 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554404145078 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4443709996 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.176470588 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7058823529 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229058115761 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695914897933 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454961319406 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131585794144 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328731111213 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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