Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation

Internet is a vital part of every society. By expanding internet in every spot of world, all countries can flourish and progress quickly. Some people believe that government should delicate their budget in enhancing public transportation, while others disagree and think public transportation is more critical. In my view, I am sure that governments must spend money to access internet rather than to improver public transportation for two important reasons.
First and foremost reason is that spending money on accessing internet by government can help people to contact to each other. In some haphazard situation, people have to stay from each other in other to be safe. Therefore, accessible internet can be helpful for them to continue their relationships. For example, when I was young, I had a girlfriend who lived in another city very far from my place. I vividly remember we made a appointment every month to meet each other because we did not have any way like internet to see each other. Unfortunately, the world faced with serious problem which changed everything in people’s life. We was not exception and had to cancel our plan to see each other. Badly, we could not see even our picture through internet since in Iran there is not accessible internet to everyone. Therefore, we had to suffer this circumstance for long time and lose the best time of our relationships. As you can see, if government of Iran provided internet, we could meet each other easily.
Second, by improving Internet student can access to so much information quickly and readily. In modern day, all government need to provide internet for student to graduate strongly. If government enhance the infrastructure of their internet, student at university can get useful information to complete their thesis more accurate. For instance, when I was master student in university, I selected drug delivery as my master thesis. As my major was mechanical engineering, I did not have any knowledge about biomedical engineering which is necessary to understand drug delivery. Fortunately, in Canada all people have access to internet and so I could find essential information easily. As a result, I could finish my thesis on time and strong and got the highest score in university. As you can see, it is important for student to access to internet easily.
In conclusion, government should spend money for improving internet access. Accessing to internet not only can help people to make a contact to each other, but also student can graduate on time with strong knowledge. Government should access internet to elite person especially.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 428, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...om my place. I vividly remember we made a appointment every month to meet each ot...
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Line 2, column 636, Rule ID: PERS_PRONOUN_AGREEMENT_SENT_START[6]
Message: Use first person plural verb with 'we': 'are', 'were'.
Suggestion: are; were
...changed everything in people’s life. We was not exception and had to cancel our pla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13348946136 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93464209691 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491803278689 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.6803911318 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.68 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.08 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306707081909 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101816581391 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111292180495 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234435855953 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0943932387292 0.0645574589148 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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