It goes without saying that developments in technology have changed our world dramatically, in the way people spend their time. Transportation is the one of many other things which technology, especially the internet, has altered. While many think that government should spend money to improve public transportation, I personally believe that it is more beneficial for the government and the society, to improve internet access. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are illustrated in the following paragraphs.
The most important reason is that by a better access to internet, desire for a more improved public transportation would be decreased. As a matter of fact, in the past, people had to go to places where their desires would be satisfied, so everyday lots of people transport from one city to another, or from one part of the city to another part of it, to complete their affairs. However, many internet sites offer their visitors that they can satisfy costumers' desires while there was no need to change their place. Consequently, better access to internet, would make it possible for people to do their affairs by using these kind of services. As a result, less public transportation would be desired. To put it into a more vivid picture, a new website has started its activities to help passengers to find a place such as hotel or motel before their arrival. These website, present photos of the available rooms in hotels and offer very lower prices than the hotel itself. By this the passengers could reserve their suitable rooms before their trip and does not need to check hotels in order to find an available and affordable room after their arrival, hence they will not need improved public transportation to carry them easily.
Furthermore, the government could increase its tax revenue from developing internet based companies, by improving internet access. In other words, more people have started to use internet services which companies offer. The number of internet based transactions will be increased in following years, due to that people enjoy electronic transactions. Subsequently, the government could get more money from taxes on these transactions. As a result, the money that was spent to improve internet access will compensate, and even this money could be used to improve internet access further. For illustration, I personally prefer to purchase in internet shops which offer more services than regular shops, and every time I buy an object, I have to pay my taxes as well as the internet shop must.
In summary, taking all this into account, I personally do believe that it is more beneficent for the government itself and the society to spend more money on improving internet access. Less need to transport and the increase in government revenue are my reasons for holding such opinion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 620, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...for people to do their affairs by using these kind of services. As a result, less public t...
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Line 3, column 860, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this website' or 'These websites'?
Suggestion: This website; These websites
...as hotel or motel before their arrival. These website, present photos of the available rooms ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, hence, however, so, well, while, in summary, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13174946004 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84222593299 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477321814255 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9546677403 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.8 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.15 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313135107065 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109788336074 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104004880836 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231668042736 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062537990528 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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