Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is necessary to be competitive in order to succeed in life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your response.
I disagree with the idea that it is necessary to be
competitive to succeed in life. Sometimes life offers no
alternative to competition, but there are better options
most of the time. Competing against someone else
usually requires too much energy Also, competition
often leads to somebody's feelings getting hurt. I think
cooperation is easier and nicer than competition.
First of all, I think that competing is usually a waste
of energy Competition is about feeling superior to
someone else, which usually involves spending more
energy than the other person. Some time ago, a friend
and I both bought a video game and started competing
to see who could earn the highest score. To get higher
scores, my friend and I spent increasing amounts of
time and energy playing the game. Eventually, I had no
energy left after playing and couldn't do anything else.
I decided it wasn't worth it and refocused my energy
on other activities.
I also dislike competition because at least one of
the competitors always loses. Losing usually makes
the loser feel sad or angry so I don't think situations
should be approached competitively. A dassmate
and I once found ourselves tied for the top rank of a
dass mid-semester. For the rest of the semester, we
competed to overtake each other's rankings, and in
the end she came in second. She felt as if her effort
had been wasted and was pretty sad.
Cooperating is a much better alternative to
competing. Everybody involved can spend less
energy to achieve the same results, and cooperative
behavior rarely leads to sadness or anger. One time,
a friend and! both wanted to participate in a writing
competition. Rather than act competitively, we
decided to cooperate with each other. We edited each
other's stories and helped each other write. When his
story did better than mine, I didn't feel bad, because I
had helped him write it.
While some people might think its necessary to be
competitive in order to succeed, I think that being
competitive is not a great option.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, at least, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06725146199 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75200882013 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608187134503 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4097910796 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5238095238 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2857142857 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 40.0 4.53405017921 882% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116539613517 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402167586515 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0935901746577 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0294237094403 0.150856017488 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667809089009 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.