Professions and social life have always been played important roles in individuals’ lives. In this regard, although some people believe that people’s overall delight is determined by their social lives more than by their jobs, I have enough reasons to object to this point of view. I will enlarge on what I mean in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, people’s euphoria is inextricably linked to how much money they have, and their jobs are main sources of achieving money. So, people’s occupations have a greater impact on their overall happiness. To put it in a more vivid picture, money is the best solution for people’s difficulties, without which they will land on troubles. As a result, having enough money to meet their families supplies, people will be happier than they are nowadays. In addition, should people have well-paid jobs, they will achieve money in order to allocate to their needs and recreations, which makes them delightful. In other words, the more people’s salaries are, the more happiness they have in their lives. As a way of illustration, take popular football players. Most of them are so happy even if they do not have very great social lives since they have to exercise very hard in order to be ready for their matches. Therefore, occupations play a more essential role in people’s delight.
Secondly, people often spend a considerable amount of time on their occupations proportionately, so they will be happier if they have a great time when they are at work. It means that people’s professions have a huge impact on their overall euphoria. To clarify this point, people have to work from dawn till dusk to satisfy their requirements. Consequently, their satisfaction with their jobs has a direct effect on their happiness. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own experience. I used to work for a factory. It was not appropriate to me because my dream was working in a civil engineering company as I was at university. So, it was too tough for me to continue that profession which made me so upset. Thus, I modified my job as soon as I found a job at a civil engineering company. As a result, had I found my lovely job sooner, I would have had a happier life.
To sum up, all things considered, I firmly believe that people’s occupations have a greater impact on their delight than the social life does. It is due to the fact that, not only, are jobs great sources of money, but also people often spend much of their time at their workplaces.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, i mean, in addition, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79090909091 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82125565504 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479545454545 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1300360621 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8333333333 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108136943866 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379264716578 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390545763133 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0861514292418 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239796037156 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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