Governments need to spend money on beautiful things more than on practical things.
From the dawn of civilization, where governments should spend their money has always played an important role in societies’ success. In this regard, some people believe that governments should allocate more money to beautiful things than should it assign to practical ones. As far as I am concerned, I have enough reasons to object to that viewpoint. I will enlarge on what I mean in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, success of every community is inextricably linked to how many practical things are done in those communities. To put it in a more vivid picture, a society can improve in different fields if its governments spend a considerable amount of money on its infrastructures. As a way of illustration, take economy. Should a government allocate a vast amount of money to its economy, it will make country a better place for living. It is due to the fact that people’s income will increase when the country’s economic condition gets better. As a result, spending money on practical things will be more beneficial for people, which is the most significant purpose of every government with which a society will achieve success. Therefore, governments should allocate more money to practical things than how much they assign to beautiful ones.
Secondly, paying for practical things makes people do their duties as seriously as possible since they understand that government is stern about individuals’ performance; however, spending money on beautiful things makes people carefree. To clarify this point, spending money on beautiful things demonstrates that governments think about superficial things which have little impacts on people’s lives. Take building a number of theme parks which are built by government in a city, for example. Those places can make city more beautiful whereas people would use those facilities if they had enough money to go there. In addition, that process does not happen unless people have great sources of revenue, which will be obtained if governments spend more money on practical things.
To sum up, all things considered, I firmly believe that more money should be allocated to practical things by governments. Given that, not only does government make society more successful, but also it motivates people in order to do their duties more seriously.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, for example, i mean, in addition, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25067385445 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92429104581 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504043126685 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1519041065 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.222222222 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6111111111 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50943238223 0.236089414692 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168386498092 0.076458572812 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141099430184 0.0737576698707 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.349445292858 0.150856017488 232% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041297918162 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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