Many people want more vacation to get off from their stress. There is an argument that more vacation time but low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation. I disagree with this. I have two reasons about this topic which I will explore in this essay.
To begin with, we cannot earn more money when we have more vacation. Then, financial problems will get serious, and people cannot buy essential food and daily supplies. Moreover, they cannot enjoy what they want to do. I have a good example about this. When the fashionable t-shirt appeared, many students, including me, wanted to buy it. However, one of my friends had a financial problem because her father chose more vacation but low salary. Fortunately, her mother had her job. But her income was lower than others. Hence, my friend’s allowance was relatively lower than others too. So she could not buy the t-shirt.
Next, if people have a vacation in the long-term, they can be lazy on their job. Maybe everyone feels this too. It is hard to concentrate on our job after having a break. I will give you a compelling example of this. It is my own experience, when I was in primary school. When my school declared a vacation, I was very excited about this. I watched my phone, played with my friends, and sleep all day. As a result, when the vacation was over, I tried to go back to normal life, however, it was hard for me to concentrate on my study.
Overall, I agree with this statement because we cannot earn more money when we have more vacation. In addition, we can be lazy on our job after the holidays or rest days.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ic which I will explore in this essay. To begin with, we cannot earn more money...
^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oo. So she could not buy the t-shirt. Next, if people have a vacation in the l...
^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rd for me to concentrate on my study. Overall, I agree with this statement bec...
^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r job after the holidays or rest days.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, in addition, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1339.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 293.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56996587031 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39092566329 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546075085324 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4359660758 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 55.7916666667 100.406767564 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.2083333333 20.6045352989 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.70833333333 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295204307993 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808608273132 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132264283472 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208978639176 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137419112352 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.2 11.7677419355 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 58.1214874552 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.34 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.