Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important way to improve people’s health is to clean the environment.
In the modern era, health has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, many researchers have always searched for ways to improve human's health. A controversial question which deserves some words here is that whether cleaning the environment has the most influence on human health or not. I content that a clean environment is the best ways for improving human health. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mentioned is that having a clean environment prevent to spread disease. To elaborate on my point, human life in the city, and in a day they cross the street and avenue. In this situation, if the street is not clean and many rubbish are in it, these places would the best place for growing disease and spread them. Furthermore, when the environment becomes clean, the weather also become clean. In this situation, people breath fresh and clean air, and they would not get a sick such as Asthma and many other kinds of disease. Besides, having clean and suitable water is a result of a clean environment. When people do not have clean water, they should face many diseases like a stomachache. In this situation, they may get a sick disease beside of using dirty water.
Another reason which deserves some word here is that having healthy food is the result of a clean environment. To shed more light on this matter, fruit, vegetable, and meet are having a direct influence on human health. Nowadays increasing diseases due to environment pollution among plants and animals that can also affect humans indirectly cause spreading plenty of problems. Take a personal experience as an example, last year, in Isfahan, I and other family members were Poisoned by eating vegetables that were irrigated with polluted waters In all times, people try to proper suitable and healthy food for improving their body condition. If the environment such as the sea becomes dirty, all fishes use dirty and unhealthy water. In this situation, when human want to eat fish, all disease is inlet human body, and they will get sick. Furthermore, we have the same situation for another kind of food such as chicken, cows and sheep. They eat unhealthy food, all disses transferred to the human body.
All in all, considering all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that a clean human environment has a direct influence on their health. I believe that cleaning the environment not only prevent spread disease but also prevent using unhealthy food.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9976744186 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66384258699 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495348837209 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9834335858 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4347826087 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6956521739 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223867339914 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724357678831 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648119834025 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152776865215 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769876513879 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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