Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The most important way to improve people’s health is to clean the environment.
In today's modern and sophisticated world, being healthy is the most essential factor which should be considered in people's lives. In this connection, there are several factors affecting one's health. Although contested by many that the matter of cleaning the environment can improve people's health is highly beneficial, such an issue is regarded as both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I concur with the notion that a clean environment has significant impacts on one's health, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
First, increasing air pollution has a detrimental effect on people's health. To be more specific, many diseases stem from air pollution, and by improving air quality, many health problems are reduced. According to my own experience, when I lived in a big city with low air quality, I could not breathe readily. After a doctor examined me, he informed me that my lungs were infected. He advised me to migrate to the countryside where was not polluted and has fresh air to deal with my respiratory disease; otherwise, my health problem became worse and turned to lung cancer. When I moved to a small city, I could notice the effects of fresh air on improving my health significantly, and I recovered gradually, so much so that there is no infection in my lungs.
Second, a clean environment can protect human sources of food which enhances their health. To elucidate, a person should consume healthy food to sustain health by strengthening their muscle and skeleton, so it is a vital part of people's lives. If meat and other sources of food perish, it will be a dangerous threat to humanity. For example, last year, people who lived near a sea were poisoned, and some of them died. After conducting some researches, the government understood that a factory dumped its industrial waste in the seawater, which contains harmful substances for marine animals. As people in that region were dependent on fish as the major source of food, they were poisoned. Therefore, cleaning the habitats can save animals' health which pertains to maintaining people's health.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that cleaning the environment plays a crucial role in human health. Not only does polluted surrounding cause respiratory disease, but it also damages people's source of food.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...it also damages peoples source of food.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11282051282 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8526606149 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571794871795 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1897186904 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.947368421 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5263157895 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219410670054 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697138876251 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513320093606 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137515375064 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474937952367 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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