In the past decade, as time marches on, the development of technology and science, have drastically changed people’s lives. One of the substantial technological advancements is the invention of television that utterly influenced all human’s lives, especially the young ones. In this regard, many people think television has welcomed many benefits, although others hold a different opinion that the negative effect of television undermines the advantages. From my vantage point, the latter view carries more weight. I take the position on account for the following reasons.
The first reason that makes me hold the belief that having a television at everyone’s place is created social distancing among the community. Furthermore, it has negatively affected everyone’s physical health. To be more specific, people in their free time like to spend time at home watching movies which makes them sedentary instead of going out and doing outdoor activities. Additionally, staying indoors and not meeting relatives as well as friends, create social distancing between people, and as a result, people might feel lonely in their lives. For instance, from a recent survey of the University of California, around 70% of people have been suffering from obesity due to spending a lot of their time on technology compared to the past time, and thereby, it leads to many health problems in their lives such as high BP and high cholesterol at a very young age.
Another noteworthy point is that prolonged television viewing is been linked to many mental problems. Since youngsters are very vulnerable and easily get addicted to new technology, spending long hours watching television constantly would attack their mental situation. Also, adolescents may get deviated from their education which is not a good sign for their future perspective. My brother is a compelling example of this. When he was in high school, he used to spend many hours watching his favorite cartoon programs on television and wasted his precious time playing video games. Consequently, he failed his board exam and simultaneously, started feeling very depressing and frustrated. Fortunately, he realized his mistake and changed his habit at the right time. Therefore, making a television an utmost priority would badly affect young one’s mental health.
Lastly, having discussed the issue from this point of view, I rather look at it from another standpoint. Admittedly, there are evident adverse effects of watching television, however, it could have some positive sides too. To shed more light on it, sometimes watching favorite movies on television help people to refresh their mood. Also, in the time of covid-19, when people have to stay indoors for many months, the majority of people would have survived because of television that helped them to be active at home for many months constantly. As a result, despite being adversely affected, it has some benefits which cannot be neglected.
All in all, contemplating all remarks, I strongly believe that the drawbacks of television can easily outweigh the benefits. This is because not only it has created many physical problems, but also, developed mental issues in young one’s life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 741, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...heir time on technology compared to the past time, and thereby, it leads to many health p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, look, may, so, therefore, well, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2708.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34122287968 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83211912517 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552268244576 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 838.8 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5558131406 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.32 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.28 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171194245135 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047852374288 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370936481361 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990111933234 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512810916481 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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