Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Time flies dragging alternation in entertaining as it create myriad form of interesting media for human to take enjoy. Appearance of movies and television have no exception, which spark a debate that whether watching movies and television lead to adverse effect on the youngster or not. In my view, spend time on those things will cause an unexpected problem.
To begin with, wasting time meaningless in young age usually come from consuming time on movies. The purpose of television is to born for making people relax after a stressful moment since it can drive people attention into incredible scene, amazing action or abstract context. This suggest that people will easily addict to this attractive moving image through the screen. Hence, youngster who is not sustainable in controlling themselves will immerse in watching unrealistic movie without pausing. For example, when I watched an outstanding cartoon on television; somehow, I cannot stop watching until last episode. Therefore, many essential issues which have to do in life such as studying, sharing time with friend and family will postpone since meaningless time spending in movie distract people.
Furthermore, bad behavior are affected through movie a lot since the variety content which is showed on television. To be more accurate, most of children mind are not firm in this state as their ability to recognize negative idea has not honed yet. Therefore, the information on television which is one kind of converting play a vital role in forming human awareness. Unfortunately, the content on television is not totally censored result in some of adversely idea will convey to young people. As a result, the unsuitable information sharp young people preconceptions in an injurious way such as angry behavior, weird action like movie character. The rise of crime nowadays initiate to the misleading understand of the world.
In the end, spending time commence a myriad of negative effect for young people who is not tough enough to face the managing time and stay away from bad things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 55, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'creates'?
Suggestion: creates
...gging alternation in entertaining as it create myriad form of interesting media for hu...
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Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
...wed on television. To be more accurate, most of children mind are not firm in this state as thei...
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Line 3, column 570, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an injurious way" with adverb for "injurious"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ation sharp young people preconceptions in an injurious way such as angry behavior, weird action li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, for example, kind of, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21752265861 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79599701864 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604229607251 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6972380332 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.9375 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167708332452 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487182903625 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456164777244 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104195128022 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0047393881806 0.0645574589148 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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