Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people think that movies and television have negative impact on young people, while others do not think so. Based on my personal experience, I think that movies and TV have generally a negative effects on the youth. The reasons are as follows.
First, most movies and TV programs contain inappropriate contents that might affect young people's behavior, such as violence and swear word, so if they watch too much movies, they might develop an extremely negative personality if children watch too much of these programs. Take my friend Todd as an example. Todd watched a myriad of movie and TV programs when he was young, and he tended to follow horrible behaviors from the antagonists in several movies. For instance, he tried to imitate bad guys in the movie and pretended to kill and hurt others for fun. In addition, he also learned tons of foul words from several political late night shows. As a result, his characteristic was distorted when he was a child. Nevertheless, when he grew up, he decided to watch less movies and read more books and magazines. Several months later, his horrible personalities were all gone.
Secondly, parents should care about children's mental health, and allowing them to watch too many television programs might severely compromise their mental status. To elaborate, news in my country contains terrible content, such as people fighting or having a quarrel with others. What's more, news regarding disaster and war are extremely hard for kids to digest. Therefore, if young people watch too much negative news, they might feel despondent about the society, and in the long run, it might make them develop an extremely pessimistic personality. However, if parents disallow their children to watch TV and let them hang out with their friends instead, it can help them establish a more positive characteristic because chatting and having fun with friends can help young people become a better person.
Finally, kids should place an emphasis on their learning, and if they watch too many movies or TV programs, they might become extremely ineffective in their studies. Take my friend Joe as an example. When Joe was young, he spent a significant amount of time watching movies using his computer. More precisely, he spent literally 4 to 5 hours per day relishing different types of movies for fun. Consequently, he did not have enough time to do his schoolwork, study for his exam, and prepare for school projects. In the long run, his learning ability was damaged due to those movies. Nonetheless, my sister Kitty did not have access to any movies or television. As a result, when she was young, she had more time to study, so she got a pretty descent grade at school.
In conclusion, I maintain that movies and television cause more negative influence to young people's behavior. This is mainly because the majority of TV programs and movies contain bad content. Also, parents should focus on their children's mental health and learning status, so they should definitely keep movies and television out of their kid's life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 163, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ce and swear word, so if they watch too much movies, they might develop an extremely...
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Line 3, column 596, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
Suggestion: to
... fun. In addition, he also learned tons of foul words from several political late ...
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Line 3, column 769, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun movies is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...s, when he grew up, he decided to watch less movies and read more books and magazine...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun television seems to be countable; consider using: 'many televisions'.
Suggestion: many televisions
... health, and allowing them to watch too many television programs might severely compromise thei...
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Line 5, column 282, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...ghting or having a quarrel with others. Whats more, news regarding disaster and war a...
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Line 7, column 743, Rule ID: CONFUSION_OF_DECENT_DESCENT[2]
Message: Did you mean 'decent'?
Suggestion: decent
...more time to study, so she got a pretty descent grade at school. In conclusion, I ma...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2559.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00782778865 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62522693068 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502935420744 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 768.6 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.044895353 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7777777778 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9259259259 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.85842293907 363% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184962127457 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555329742219 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05490010747 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129866475172 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605431349847 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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