It is clearly understood that in such a sophisticated world, the effects of movies and television programs on people, especially younger people a lot, the way that younger people behave is a very important issue in society and the government should give enough attention to that issue. Some people have inclined toward the opinion that movies and television programs have more bad effects than positive effects on younger people, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. As far as I am concerned, with the development of technology and the internet, no one can forbid younger people from watching movies and television so they should accept this fact and try to make good material for younger people. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first significant point to be mentioned is that younger people need to feel more independent, also they should have this opportunity to choose what they want, and have a choice to watch different movies and different channels is a sample of that, also with developing of technology and internet they have access to all the material, and different movies. So forbidding young people to do not to watch bad programs is not a solution. The government in society, and parents in the family play a key role in these circumstances, the government should make positive material for television and spend more money to produce a good movie; hence, the number of positive materials increases and younger people prefer to watch them. In addition, the parent's role is very effective on their children, they should try to rise them properly, and teach them to recognize good material and avoid harmful movies or television shows.
Another reason, which should be taken into consideration, is that younger people naturally want to know more and explore more information from the world, so forbidding them from something like a specific movie or television program, make them much more interested in that material, and this is not an effective way to protect them from harmful programs and movies. Society should believe them more than before and give them the right to make choices for themselves, and in this case, society should allow younger people to recognize good material and be more responsible about their choice. Take my personal experience as a compelling example; when I was in high school my parents allow me to watch all the channels on television, but before that they talk to me and explained to me about some programs on TV, so they want to give me right to chose for myself, in the beginning, I was so curious about that shows, so one day I watch them, and I do not like that programs at all, because I grew up in that way to understand the bad things, after that, I never want to watch that movies or programs, and I believe that my parent choice was excellent because they knew me very well.
In conclusion, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that society and parents could not avoid younger people from some movies and television, but they should have a plan for this matter. The government should pay more attention to this matter, and parent should grow up their children better than ever. If they try to do their best, the future of society would be in a good place.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 744, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
... prefer to watch them. In addition, the parents role is very effective on their childre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, well, whereas, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 13.8261648746 239% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2763.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 568.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86443661972 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65069466011 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.411971830986 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 855.0 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.1344086022 199% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 134.802368568 48.9658058833 275% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 197.357142857 100.406767564 197% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.5714285714 20.6045352989 197% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208094348138 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895642095917 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659997994002 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145445602552 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561983936787 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.7 11.7677419355 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.34 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.8 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.0537634409 179% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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