Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
For psychologists and social scientists, the influence of celebrities is always a fascinating topic. Personally, I strongly disagree with the opinion that celebrities influence the younger generation more than the elderly. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the older generation tend to believe the opinions of celebrities. This is probably because the older society is more hierarchy-based than today. Obedience is the most important part of a hierarchy-based structure. Therefore, the elderly are easily affected by well-known people, especially celebrities on TV. An experience of my grandparents is a compelling example of this. They have been following a political TV program called “Gondola's Show” for many years. The host of the show is called Celest Chen, who always provides biased opinions and misleading facts. Her opinions will definitely not be accepted by the younger generation. However, her words are always valued by my grandparents. The situation gets worse when it comes to voting because the older generation are easily influenced by the opinions of these celebrities. Thus, they always chose to trust celebrities rather than making decisions by themselves.
Secondly, the younger generation are often better educated since most of them received higher education. As a result, they are more likely to make wiser judgment based on their profound knowledge. For example, female celebrities like to recommend cosmetics they prefer. Although their recommendation looks convincing, I would not blindly take these suggestions. It is obvious that younger people are less affected by celebrities. In contrast, older people in my family are easily influenced by the advertisement made by celebrities. They enjoy watching advertisements on TV and bought a lot of unnecessary products such as cosmetics or medical products. These products look amazing from the surface; however, most of them are vulnerable and flawed. These interesting phenomena show that celebrities influence the elderly more than the young.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that celebrities influence the older generation more than the young. This is because the elderly like to trust the opinions of celebrities and because they are not as well educated as younger people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55462184874 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14948097903 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512605042017 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.1563488757 48.9658058833 41% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.32 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.28 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219653107185 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617834018337 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480467513346 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142022731462 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182970328122 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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