Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The influence of the opinions of celebrities is always debatable. Some people believe that younger people are more impacted by the views of famous persons in their lifetime more than older people. In my opinion, I think this to be true for many reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, celebrities are able to capture the attention of young adults more easily than older people. Young people have more time to watch television, go to the movies, attend sports events and music concerts. On the other hand, older people have more responsibilities and they rarely have spare time to entertain themselves. As a result, modern day stars are more recognized by younger people and hence, their opinions and preferences are more influential on the youth. My own experience is a compelling example on what I mean. When I was a kid, I used to watch many scientific documentaries. I once had a chance to see a documentary about the universe called Cosmos, which starred Carl Sagan who was a well-known scientist then. After that, I began to read many books for him and I was fascinated by the ideas I found in his books. Nevertheless, most young people now do not know anything about this famous researcher and thinker because they were born in a different era and they are mostly influenced by the celebrities of their time. Nonetheless, I, as an older person, am less affected by the celebrities of today.
Secondly, the internet have been playing a vital role in reinforcing the impact of famous people's opinions. Since the majority of people who use online platforms are relatively young, they are the ones who are more impacted by entertainers' views. Almost all famous celebrities now have Twitter account and they have millions of followers. This huge fan base, which is mostly made of youth, would be more exposed to celebrities' opinions. Consequently, some companies employ celebrities to market their products. In addition, political candidates during elections seek the endorsement of famous people to gain the votes of young adults.
In conclusion, celebrities plays essential role in the shaping of younger people's opinions more than older individuals. This is because the generation gap between celebrities in a given generation, who are mostly young, and older people in this society. This, in turn, results in older people to have different interests.
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...r people to have different interests.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, then, well, i mean, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09090909091 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84884749465 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527777777778 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1733488569 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6363636364 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.95454545455 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241595222176 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742761411167 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618243041528 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171038820055 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372031798021 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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