Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, people can obtain more information about celebrities more than past and easily, because people access various technologies, such as the internet. There is controversy about the range of ages of people who are more interested in celebrities and their importance. In my opinion, celebrities are more important to younger people than they are to older people. I feel this way because of two main reasons that I will explain in the following essay.

First of all, famous people have more influences on youth than older people. Younger people are looking for a role model more than older people in their life. When younger people reach a certain age, they understand that they need to choose a goal in their personal life. In addition, they must have their own idea and personality, so they start to find a role model who can help them choose a goal and make their personality. Also, celebrities are people who are popular, and according to today's technologies, people can know about their personality and ideas easily. So they can be a good choice for youth who are looking for a role model. Celebrities can have beneficial influences on youth's personality, clothing, interest, and way of thinking. Paradoxically, older people do not need a role model because they have a stable personality.

Secondly, younger people need more entertainment in their free time. Younger people spend their free time watching movies and sports and searching on social media more than older people. As younger people access the internet, so they can aware of new movies of their favorite actor and important games of their favorite team. furthermore, they can pay attention to specific actors or athletes because of their interest, therefore they start to follow their work. For example, my friend is a fan of Lionel Messi, who is a famous football player, so he does not miss any of his football games. Also, he follows all news about him and his team. Unlike younger people, older people are not interested in following these kinds of entertainment, and these entertainments are boring for them.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that celebrities are more important to youth than they are to older people. This is because younger people need a role model and imitate, and they play an important role as entertainment for younger people who are following celebrities' works.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 676, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youths'' or 'youth's'?
Suggestion: youths'; youth's
...ities can have beneficial influences on youths personality clothing interest and way o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91348600509 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62529086045 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.396946564885 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 393.0 20.1344086022 1952% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1931.0 100.406767564 1923% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 393.0 20.6045352989 1907% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 154.0 5.45110844103 2825% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389535060566 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.389535060566 0.076458572812 509% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301546132431 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05932765685 0.0645574589148 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 198.2 11.7677419355 1684% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -327.42 58.1214874552 -563% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 156.6 10.1575268817 1542% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.68 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 25.54 8.01818996416 319% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 10.002688172 580% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 159.2 10.0537634409 1583% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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